Odyssey

The first light of day
The first breeze of morning
Lift you off your calloused feet
And carry you toward me

As if you're floating on air

But you're not here, you shall be here soon

Because I am missing you dearly.

I stand on jagged cliffs...waiting...
My outstretched arms
and a chorus of gentle waves
are anxious to welcome you home

I began to worry that you will never

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Because my hands are getting tried

My heart is getting cold

Where is the sun 

that warms my frigid heart? 

I see him at last, 

his face blurred in the distance. 

It's looks as if you've been in a battle

I can just see the war in your eyes

But I need you here by my side

No where else, just here in my eyes

third place

May 25, 2015

• Just for fun
• Odyssey

Author's Note

I wrote this poem with Elisa in the group 'Pairing Up Poetry'. The Italic stanza's are hers.

Link to Elisa's profile:
http://www.writerscafe.org/PhantomAngel147

Reviews

[Nyu]

"Where is the sun that warms my frigid heart? I see him at last, his face blurred in the distance."
Although I highlighted this section, really every line is great.
There was a certain depth to this piece that was very enjoyable.
The objects and feeling of the character are seamlessly woven together.
I loved it, great work :)

[Emily]

Thank you!

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!
..]

It's a really good poem, it felt warm. It's been a while since I've found a poem like this. I also apologize for taking a long time to read this, my request is filled with poems.

[Emily]

Thanks! Don't worry about it, I have had read request up to 300 before!

[Lizardo]

You both did a great job writing this one.
I've read the Odyssey (Personally I think that its a great book) and this poem really goes with it.
Great poem Emily!

[Emily]

Thanks Lizardo!

[Lizardo]

Sorry I haven't checked your writing lately, but I will try to make my time usefull (Thats what I'm doing with everyone)

[Emily]

No, it's fine. Thanks again!

[nazia]

Both of you did an excellent job here... Great work :)

[Emily]

Thanks nazia!!

[Matching Socks]

Outstanding work you guys, you really blended well.

[Emily]

Thanks Ana!

[Lavender Soya]

The emotions are quite palpable and the descriptive style truly captured my attention. Great work!

[Emily]

Thank you!

[Lavender Soya]

You're welcome.

[Dark Poet]

I fell in love with this poem. I can see the desperation for seeing the man you love in this. It is absolutly beautiful! Well done, both of you.

[Emily]

Thank you!

[E G TEN]

Nicely balanced till the end, even though you can tell the difference " sway"
Of the two lovely poetess, the performance was still synced as one union
Like a cross breed roses, (not to mention writing about odyssey which is more
Often a masculine topic) Well done ladies" Thanks for Sharing!;)

[Emily]

Thank you!!

[Ruth]

Beautiful collaboration...returning home may never be the same after such but love can heal most things...

[Emily]

Thanks Poppy!

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

A stunning collaboration, Emily. Anticipatory, melancholy, and wistful. Enjoyed!

[Emily]

Thanks Sharon!!