California Is A F*****g Homewrecker

We are naked

Together

When we are fully clothed

Save exposed toes

And twenty feeble fingers

Tracing spine

And greeting our corresponding prints with

Familiar and distinct satisfaction

No sound

But the plead and pull of gravitating hips and lips

Inconveniently cracked

And revived by your invigorating stem of hand

There are no words

But frequent upward turns of moistened mouth

And the occasional clash of bare and ruthless bone

Your face rests on my unembellished shoulder blade

And it is the most intimate we have been in months

We don’t speak

But you know

That I will never say goodbye 

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

I think I saw in the comments below words like "bittersweet" and "desperation" and I think those are very accurate. Raw emotion. I like that. Nice work!

[Robert Strzalko]

Great title and a strong conclusion make it a memorable read.

[parkerjeslick]

Very good writing! The expanded vocabulary definitely adds substantial detail and paints a clear picture.

[emily joe]

Thanks so much!

[A. Amos]

simply beautiful and very strong writing I love reading you and will come for more

[emily joe]

Thanks so much, it means a lot to me! Please do (:

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my friend

[Frieda P]

This is certainly a different kind of love poem, bittersweet and a tad bit of desperation, not sure I got the title in reference to the poem but it's what drew me in, enjoyed the read.

[emily joe]

I'm glad you understood the bittersweet part. And ah yes, the faint smell of desperation. I wrote this poem after my boyfriend of 2 years moved to California in September. I envisioned this being sort of what our first embrace would look like upon being reunited. But its never so graceful, is it? Before you know it, it's over. Airport goodbyes are only good for one thing, and that is the bathroom it offers to cry in. Thanks so much for reading my poem, and for your feedback (:

[Frieda P]

Oh my, not a happy ending was it, thanks for sharing your story, yes now I get the title :-) Was my pleasure.