The Forest Has a Secret

The forest has a secret

For I heard it whisper in the night

All the trees and flowers hummed, until the moon had turned to light

The forest has a secret

For I heard its laughter in the day

The birds and all the bugs, hid their faces in the shade

The forest has a secret

And now that secret’s mine

For I asked the owl in the oak, and the needles of the pine

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Beautifully written. Such wonderful, natural imagery used in this piece. It really captures you and the fact that the rhythm flows so smoothly, it really carries you through the piece. Absolutely gorgeous. Although, I did notice one small error. In the fifth line: "For I heard it's laughter" it should be "its" not "it's" (without the apostrophe). Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this! Well done.

[horsedreamer]

amazinfg! the world has big plans for you this piece is beautiful much like your others love it i cant get enough of your poems they bring a smile to my face

[Jason Galliger]

A well done piece. The last three stanzas add a feeling of allure and mystery that both wraps up the poem and makes the reader want more. One small note; the line "until the moon had turned to light" took me a second read to fully grasp so you may want to consider a small rephrase (or not it's entirely up to you!)

[Lydia Blackwell]

This is very appealing to me and kind of gave me the shivers a bit. I love it.
Also, cool picture!

[deeps]

wonderful write, i like this alot.

[Norma M Sutton]

Beautiful.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer. The words told a very good story. The words are true. If we listen to the spirits of the woods. We could gain great knowledge. Total poem is outstanding. You write with a Native American view on life.
Coyote