The Phantom Memory

She wanders lonely as a cloud

With gliding steps of silent grace,

Wrapped in a thick and murky shroud

Of mist that seldom marks her trace.

 

Serene and fitted to embrace

Was she throughout those temperate times-

For her time walked with leisured pace;

For her bells rang with saintly chimes.

 

My heart leapt up when I beheld

The shining shimmers in her eyes;

The auric aura that dispelled

Uneasy feelings on the rise.

 

She’s now a phantom of delight

Discreetly wafting through my mind-

A shadow swathed in black and white,

A daffodil long left behind.

-EDP

Reviews

[C.E.M.]

Elegant. Missed your writing :) glad to have found my way back

[emipoemi]

glad to see you're back. thanks for reading

[barleygirl]

First let me say that I'm finally catching up my 90 read-requests from when I was away for 2 months & you RR'ed me on 2 poems by Talia -- gotta thank you for turning me on to a new writer I love. I love this poem. I love rhyme & rhythm, but I love that yours does not feel "central" to the reading . . . but rather it's the journey you take us on that stands out most. I have a best friend (RIP 5 yrs ago) that still follows me around like this . . . he adds so much to my understanding of what I'm doing, along my path. I love how your poem makes this sound perfectly normal, albeit a bit bizarre, rather than the delusions of a madman! Great imagery to convey feelings & sensory (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[emipoemi]

So glad you enjoyed it!! Yeah, I make a habit to make my poems more about the journey than the rhyme scheme. But thanks for reading! Much appreciated.

[H L Rose]

I’m in love with imagery, word choice, tone, and pretty much everything about it.

It is lovely to say aloud and the last line “a daffodil long left behind” is my favorite.

I’m glad to have read it!

[emipoemi]

So glad! Thanks for reading.

[H L Rose]

Of course!

[Lindsaytot]

This is really good my dude!!! The word choice is great. You compared things to stuff that people wouldn't normally think of, if that makes sense? Also, it has really good rhythm!! Keep writing, for real!!

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! You made my day with this comment! And trivia: four of those lines are roughly borrowed from Wordsworth (as a writing exercise), and the rest was merely the sighs and lulls of my wondrous Muse, working her magic. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the encouragement! I'm 10 years strong in the business and I aint backing down yet!

[A. Kim Spradling]

It is hard to express my thoughts on this interesting poem. It would be fanciful to know your mind while writing it. We all write for different reasons. I would dearly like to know yours regarding this work.

[emipoemi]

I write to express my inner feelings, and convey philosophical notions about a given topic. I'm very eclectic in my writing, and everything I write is up for interpretation (no right or wrong answers). I let my poetry speak for itself, and the readers to take what they may from it. But what I can say about this poem, is that the inspiration was from having read someone take four existing lines and have them start every stanza, so I did the same with four Wordsworth lines, and the poem simply wrote itself.

[A. Kim Spradling]

Funny when I write, it is much the same. Something inside me takes over and before I know it, the piece is complete. My short verses are rather preachy, but sometime are a symbolism of my most inner thoughts.

[Rachel Richardson]

First off, I adore the Emily DIckinson reference in the first line. I have taken to reading your poems out loud because for one thing, it helps me focus and for another, I love the sound of your verses read a loud. You spoke of pealing bells and saintly chimes and may I just say that I find your words to make such graceful sounds as well.

[emipoemi]

Well, I humbly thank you very much. So kind of you to say so (and do so at that - not many have tended to read my poetry aloud, as far as I'm concerned, so many thanks for really delving into the sound of it...sound, at least at this stage of my poetic career, is a prime priority when I write). And......I don't know of any Emily Dickinson references, but there are four Wordsworth ones, each one beginning each stanza (for it was my intent to do a reverse glossa, and use ....in some shape or form.... an existing line from a poet at the start of each stanza). Thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Lola Positive]

Great imagery, I was really taken on a journey. Really enjoyed

[emipoemi]

So glad. Thanks for reading. Much appreciated.