raising my eyes

yet another attempt at you know what!

 beckoning the sound of birds awaking

welcoming the needs of the soil

painting the pages as yet unsullied

inviting love from a mortal's coil

laughter and wine, warmer weather come due

 exchanging flight for silence said

raising my eyes to a naked oak's core

or a pillow 'pon an outdoor bed

rhythmic resolution tops my list

metaphorical phrases laid bare

soft the whispers caressing the call

for the towelling of golden hair 

his yesterday's words crowded the walls

bright muralled with visions galore

its frame enhanced by uniqueness made 

its master's  play wins him rich rewards

Author's Note

Reviews

[Crowley]

I floated on a swell of metaphoric breakers on this one. The pace was enchanting and the tone a renaissance dream. Enough of the poetic rhetoric, this was a beauty and a revelatory tribute. And that video, just wonderful. Great job Emma!

[emmajoygreen]

My goodness, glad i had to wake up this early morning, dawn knocking on my world, in fact. Your review is incredibly kind, Crowley, thank you muchly, sir. Must admit to loving the song, the video.. add it as often as can.

[Nima.Hope]

Marvelous are the metaphors used in this poem. I got to learn new words from this smooth and delightful poem of yours Emma. The description of elements of nature that you used is harmonious, well done.
I wish to experience a lovely day in England in future. I'd like to live 6 months in Iran and live the other 6 months in England and Austria�™.
Take care

[emmajoygreen]

Many thanks for your kind review, Nima.. nature means so much to me, which is why at suitable times, my working life is outdoors, surrounded by the all around. Can lose myself for hours and hours working on the land, but - not in deep snow! //
Of course I opt to live in my homeland, in the peace here in a non-industrial/commercial county but yes, can understand you wanting to visit Austria. Tis also beautifully green and quiet, its people and cities are handsome, refined and wonderful. Of course the composer, Mozart, lies at its heart. His music Is played everywhere but especially in Saltsburg- Mozart's birth-place. Even outdoors by young musicians not as buskers but because they want/need to share with everyone wanting to listen.. First time I saw/heard that, I cried throughout a ten minute piece as the music echoed then spiralled away from the walls of handsome buildings! Go visit when Saltzburg's Mozart festival is on! NB There is the most wonderfully delicious 'sacher torte' cake to be bought in Austria; at its best it could be manna from heaven!

[Nima.Hope]

I appreciate your attitude towards nature, it's fantastic to breathe in the green lands of Europe.
Salzburg is fascinating, so are Vienna and Budapest that are connected with Danube. It's the land of music, Mozart, Beethoven, Chopin and many other great minds. Well, for me learning German is a bit hard due to it's complexity compared to English. That's the reason I admire living in Britain more than German countries. I grew up reading Sherlock Holmes, Charles Dickens and listening to Pink Floyd and The Beatles all British🤍.
I will surely try that cake you mentioned☺️.
Take care dear Emma💐

[Gee]

Has me casting my mind back many moons when my relationship (with my now wife) was moving from the lust to love stage and had me realising that the wham bam thank you mam part of my life was even more empty than thought at the time.
If you are moving into rhyme I'm moving out :)) As Cherrie so rightly said, tis lovely.
Good afternoon

[emmajoygreen]

People need those times you so sensitively mention, Gee. Life happens as do letters and music and thinking and.. all sorts

Thank you for commenting about the rhyme, but am trying to do new things now, learned a lot about about self and others of late.
Good afternoon to you too, sir.

[emmajoygreen]

Come to think of it, guess one should learn something new every day... then - is just remembering it the next day!!!

[Tina]

This poem makes me think of a warm beautiful sunny day.

[emmajoygreen]

Thank you Tina.. that conjurs up all sorts - adds another dimension! Happy new 2024

[Cherrie]

Sensuality is a dance. A child like game for adults. You have linked body and soul behind a lace tapestry. Emma, It's lovely.

[emmajoygreen]

What a delightfully kind review, dear Cherrie. Thank you! Will pop in later and leave you a message.. not need to answer or only when a few seconds, trying to keep in touch and pass on a hug. (((Cherrie)))

[Cherrie]

You I feel fine until I'm not. So for now I'll take this 90/10 split of my emotions & are always lifted by you. :) thank you Emma

[emmajoygreen]

There are certain times and emotions that have to go at their own pace, darlin' - keep looking, if can, for sweet sights, moments that make you glimmer a wee smile, perhaps. Am here if and when.. and don't doubt others will say the same... (You)

[emmajoygreen]

Sending a warm and fond hug, dear friend.. Had to add the 'r'. a while ago called jacob that, by mistake. of course. Thank goodness he is one of he Cafe's gents - and forgave me (Cherrie)

[Ken Simm.]

This is a very melodic and quite sensual piece. The towelling of golden hair for instance. It also has your visual and sensual signposts that create a mood and an atmosphere in the readers mind as they progress through, in this case, your morning.
It also seems to me to be directed towards who in my view would be a very lucky man. In that I may be wrong but.... Whatever, it is a gorgeous piece.

[emmajoygreen]

Good morning, sir Ken! Hope your today is better than yesterday and your health more so. Many thanks for your kind words, That wandering muse has eluded me recently - we know why, So have been picking up touches of inspiration from here or there as we all do over time and place. You know how much I appreciate your reviews and more, have for years!

Wishing you a warm, dry and tasty weekend, dear sir! What's for lunch? :)

[Ken Simm.]

Strawberry jam on toast.

[Ken Simm.]

Both home made.

[emmajoygreen]

No, of course that's not showing off You wouldn't do such a thing. Bet many will be inspired and...

[Pete]

a soft and smooth, harmonic flow. we can raise our eyes but we must wipe the sleep from them and truly see - giving the creator credit where credit is due. lovely accompanying song that i well know by a talented musician and songwriter ... :)

[emmajoygreen]

Pete, many thanks for such a generous review and your respect for the Creator As to the song. tis one of my favourites, sung by a singer/musician I once - along with his wife, albeit it briefly at a gig in Bournemouth, not far from where I live. He, like his voice and music was calm and composed, unlike many performers who are hyped up after a show. Hopefully my words complimented rather than diluted the lyrics and as you will have noticed, the Spanish tones of the music!

[Soren]

Many metaphors in this poem that begins with nature and ends with self. It is like a puzzle that only makes sense when put together correctly yet is beautiful in its pieces alone. Very nice

[emmajoygreen]

Many thanks, Soren.. guess we beings are deep within nature and sometimes, somehow.. they create themselves without permission, I truly appreciate your review

[Lorry]

Well I do hope young lady, that when I next look at your page, I will see all that bit about not a poet erased and bulldozed, with a shiny new blue Plaque, proclaiming you "Poetess!" 😊
You know that will be saying that I'm only pretending to gush at this for whatever annoys them, but I am in proper full gush mode.
I'd ask for an autograph, but then someone would try to explain to me what an online version of an autograph is and that would be worse than when people pretend that they get the offside rule! 😊
Your words are poetry. Please remember that!

[emmajoygreen]

How to say a truly sincere thank you is harder that turning Winter to Summer right now, Lorry.. but tis all I can do, but try.

[Lorry]

You be Weclome m'dear. No, that's not right....
Ah, you be welcome! That's it! 😊

[emmajoygreen]

To my warped thinking, Lorry, typos are unique, whereas the considered correct stuff needs long searches through a dictionary! Good morning - I think,.

[Lorry]

We need typos. I mean, how else would we giggle like kids out of nowhere?
The problem with the old uns are the same as the young uns... Its wanting to giggle like giddy children, but knowing it's not cool to laugh and smile....unless you're old, then you just don't care what people think anymore! 😊

[emmajoygreen]

Troo as troo can bee, is awl in the mined..

[willweb]

Oh yes, I really enjoyed this and it is not what I would consider and attempt, it is a success at meter and rhyme. I found the flow of this very melodic and loved the phrasing. Towel drying the blonde hair, that was fun. The layout, the font, everything works well together to make this a beautiful piece of poetry.

[emmajoygreen]

What a kind review - especially by the poet whose phrasing is near perfect every time he puts thought to words!!! Will keep trying, promise. Many, many thanks, willweb.