Darkness x 8

I am the darkness times eight

I have conquered the weak minded

I have eaten the light and devoured the great

I am the darkest dark of the blinded

 

I live in the recesses of the mind

I have found refuge in the shadow of light

I have beaten the breadth of mankind

I live where only I have sight

 

I long to find my own darkened soul

I am bored for I cannot be defeated

I am tired, weary, immortal, but old

I long change from the greeter to the greeted

 

So my immortal soul chooses death instead

To repent and walk the other way

To walk towards light to pay my debt

So my new mortal soul may seize the day

Reviews

[Roger Morrison]

Wow, this is a beautiful poem. I love the way there is a vague redeeming message towards the end, but overall the tone remains dark and bleak. I feel, while reading this, like there is an internal torture; something or someone torn between good and evil; light and dark... but mostly dark. It's something I can relate to. And the twist, going form immortal to mortal... astounding.
Favorite line: I live only where I have sight. Phenomenal!
Great work with this poem!

[Adrian K. Smith]

I enjoyed the twist at the end, as having conquered darkness - the though to conquer the light appears from within a bored soul. When it all feels like everything has been said and done, when that feeling of ennui begins to settle upon us - we look for some escape, something new - just anything new. Yes, I know that most people are going to see it as a case of repentance and seeking salvation. I am just a bit twisted, and instead I see it as an opportunity to conquer both sides of the coin and all along the edges...

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Excellent expression of words, very clear and vivid thoughts.

thanks for entering my contest and the best of luck to you.

[Chillbear Latrigue]

This is not your ordinary every day poem. I thought it was ingenious and different from other things that I have read in this genre. I look forward to reading more.

[BrightEyes]

very deep and dark write; yet I feel the ending speaks of a transformation; redemption of a kind. turning from the darkness to the light - striving to become more - better. very unique and interesting piece - beautifully done and loved the dark tones :-)

[Yuko]

It's very haunting and deep. Almost disturbingly so. But even though, it's a very nice poem. Very good poem about darkness.

[trinityluv122]

Disturbingly brilliant, blackly romantic, loved it.

Lara

[ape domenigoni]

I love this...haunting...deep...good read :)

[Emza S]

Brilliant, just brilliant. Very well written, and good to read, especially when you're depressed. I love it, and that's saying something. I'm kinda picky. ^^ Keep on writing.

[sk8tagirl95]

this is a BRILLIANT poem!!! the best darkness poem Ive read and Ive read a lot!!! an amazing job :)