One gain, One loss

The delicate balance of life and death

While voices emerge

from the nursery

A celebration of infancy

but not far from here

Evil dwells, shrouded in grief
Symmetry as his guide

one gain, one loss

Was the deal He signed.
 

Author's Note

Contrast of life and death/good vs. evil with so few words.

Reviews

[darkgurl]

WOW! Very powerful, Like this You wrote this very well...Kim

[Lyrical Love]

Powerful piece!!
I am speechless...

[April Child]

Great job. The poem stands on it's own 2 feet (does a poem have feet?) a nice portrayal of good and evil or simply the cycle of life but knowing that you wrote it around that list of words and did it so succinctly well that is no mean feat (what is it with me and feet/feat today?). Very well done.

[Tovli]

that was cool! nicely done. please consider another 10 word contest--about once a month we have the advanced 10.40--using all 10 words in order; and no more or less than 40 words. You'd be great at it!. tovli

[Elyse]

Eloquent in its simplicity and its implication�I liked it very much. You left my mind imagining the varying circumstances that would lead to the situation; very intriguing, it left me wanting to know more. Nicely done!

[Belator Books]

Someone's been reading Dante. Not bad, but one is left wanting to know more of the lyrical tale.

[Helena]

Wonderful poem. Great use of the 10 words blended in with
yours, to make a truly worthy submission to Tovli's 10 word contest.
Good luck !

Helena

[lauren emily]

This is happy and sad at the same time..and I don't know which one I should feel. lol
I like this, though. It's really great.
Keep up the good work,
~Lauren