Be you

This was inspired by a poem that Yos wrote... thank-you Yos x

If only i could take you as you are,

instead of picking faults with what you do,

instead of asking you to try to be,

anything other than what is only you.

 

I loved you when we met, for what you were,

happy, proud and loving as can be,

so why now do i force you to defer,

the very essence you first showed to me.

 

I should be happy you are in my life,

with all your quirky faults of which theres few,

and if you ask me now to be your wife,

i promise i will let you just be you.

 

 

Reviews

[Vanessa P]

You write with so much truths in your words. Like how we try to change loved ones after being with them for a while. Forget the things about them that we fell in love with in the beginning. Sometimes it's hard for human nature to find contentment...We can only hope that what we are is enough for the ones we love.

[Edward Carr]

This poem is not as strong as your haiku and I will tell you why. There is not one concrete sensory vivid image adjective or noun in the whole poem except for maybe "wife." Remember this is just a critique and if you want to write better poetry, use concrete nouns like cement, and adjectivces like grey, and hard or cracked to describe it. That will bring you poetry alive. I love that haiku though. But this one needs alot of work.

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

wow! that was sweet!!

~may

[MY]

Clear and reflecting - I like this very much !! :)

[xlynne]

i really liked this. yo made it really sincere and your ryhming was impecable.

[Lily1111]

This poem so well reflects the importance of acceptance of someone for who they are not what we want them to be. I like the sense of honest acknowledgment woven within and the reconciliation in the end. Well done.

[Ray Hamilton]

From the heart, that's where poetry is supposed to come from
Good job Ray { Not a Poet }

[darkgurl]

Emotional write and wonderful, well written.