Emotions

 

 

Lost

is how i felt when you left

Alone

is how i feel now that you have gone

Scared

is how i see myself

Sad

is how i am

Happy

is a distant feeling

Anger

is now my friend

Love

will never again be mine

Hate

will stay with me

Jealousy

broke my world

Forgivness

could fix it.

Reviews

[Edmond Dantes]

i truely like this. my suggestion is this: it's great how you had it Not-Rhyme --then in the middle it rhymed, i would suggest that you end it on the rhyme. instead of "forgiveness could fix it" it could be "forgiveness could set me free." & it would have that ending flow. kudos ---thanks for sharing.

*oh, email me that picture, love it! (>^+^

[Debbie_Philly]

Beautiful write with raw emotions and heart felt words.... Great write !!

[Edward Carr]

Very interesting poem. I like what you do with the abstract emotion nouns. I think it could be be better if you used more concrete nouns after the abstracts of happy and jealous etc. I think this poem could be really good. It reminds me of the chapbook idea I have. I want the titles of my poems to be abstract nouns like anger and then write poems with concrete nouns as much as possible describing it, kind of like for anger- Chucking stones at the railroad tracks.... Could be an awesome poem with some revision.

[Ray Hamilton]

I enjoyed this write
We have all gone through this
There will be better days ahead
Thanks for sharing Ray { Not a poet }

[darkgurl]

"broke my world
Forgivness
could fix it." These words here are so true, like this I have felt this way a time or two. like this.