The attic of my mind

Poem

As I climb this staircase, so high,
to the attic of my mind,
I say my melancholic goodbye,
stashing away what I don't want anyone to find.

With rusty lock in hand,
I stare at this old trunk,
I breathe to understand,
for my heart has sunk.

I bring them out once in a while,
the dreams gone with the dust,
go through the same internal trial;
I should. I could. I must.

I stare at the blue gardens from the windows
and the matching wide skies.
I stay here within the shadows,
inhabited by moths and black butterflies.

Author's Note

Hello everyone!
Its been a long time since I have written anything, but this came to me and I had to share it. ^^
Enjoy reading.

Reviews

[Bianca]

it is breath taking i enjoy your poems and your use of vocabulary i feel as if it has a secret locked inside tinted with pain. this is truly an incredible piece

[black.butterfly]

I wrote this a long time ago, but thank you, it means a lot to me.

[Luke Masters]

Beautiful again. The third verse was very stirring. I loved this! I too feel like I'm just complimenting you all the time. Trust me - I don't always do that. You are honestly a very beautiful writer. Keep going.

[Philomela Titania Lanx]

Hey. So, I really really like this one, but I think the syllables (the flow) would work better if it was:
"I see blue GARDENS from the WINDOWS
and the..."
etc. (Did that make sense?)

[Kat-Marie Berti]

Very enjoyable read, the flow is perfect, the wording is lovely
Great poem :)

[chillz]

wow
i'm running out to compliments for your work
another great piece
chillzxx

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I find this dark but very creative listen to eettorny he has put forth some sage hints and advice I think "I stay with the shadows inhabited by----" Instead of "within" might flow better just a suggestion this is after all your poem

[Huggy Bear]

fantastic piece:)

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Beautiful poem, I like the blue gardens part, I don't know, it sounds great, if I may, perhaps I could use those two words as the title of a poem? I really enjoy your writings, I'm sorry it took me a while to read your requests, I was away from the café for quite a while. Great writing ^^

[YouoweYoupay]

I love this poem of yours because I could relate to every f*****g word. And I LOVE you for sharing this. KEEP IT UP. !!

stay here within the shadows,
inhabited by moths and black butterflies.

100/100

[Ashley Myers]

wow i love this!!! so simple, but very good!!! i like your work