NIGHT OWL!

A little poem I thought of while up late tonight :) please review :)

I'm a night owl how about you?

Up almost all night through.

Do you seem to do more at night, then day?

Its weird and funny how we like it that way.

The clock ticks, one, two then three and four,

You say you will read just a chapter more. 

The clock ticks five, six then seven and eight,

You glance at the clock, f**k that's late. 

The next night is peaceful, the best time to write,

So you pull out your pen, and think what you might.

You get to writing, and you just cant seem to quit,

You glance at the clock again, and think oh s**t. 

Writers think best at night when the silence creeps in,

with the kids in bed, a mothers me time can finally begin.

Night owls for whatever reason there might be,

Who else out there is just like me!

Reviews

[Blue]

Corrections:

*I'm a night owl how about you? -> I'm a night owl. How about you?
*Do you seem to do more at night, then day? -> Do you seem to do more at night than day?
*Its weird and funny how we like it that way. -> It's weird and funny how we like it that way.
*The clock ticks, one, two then three and four, -> The clock ticks one, two, then three, and four.
*The clock ticks five, six then seven and eight, -> The clock ticks five, six, then seven, and eight.
*You glance at the clock, f**k that's late. -> You glance at the clock--f**k that's late!
*You get to writing, and you just cant seem to quit, -> You get to writing and you just can't seem to quit.
*You glance at the clock again, and think oh s**t. -> You glance at the clock again and think, "Oh, s**t!"
*Writers think best at night when the silence creeps in, -> Writers think best at night when silence creeps in,
*a mothers me time can finally begin. -> (What do you mean by 'mothers me time'?)
*Who else out there is just like me! -> Who else out there is just like me?

Very enjoyable read, Cimmy, because I consider myself as a night owl, too. Plus, I agree with the stated reasons especially about the 'writing' part. I usually sleep around 2 in the morning and my class starts at 7 so I often resemble a zombie the next day, making me unproductive at school. :(

You are really improving when it comes to rhythm although I noticed some minor off beats in this piece. Overall, this is well done, night owl! :P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you hun I fixed up the other one that you took your time correcting... Its good now :)
Ill fix this one when I have time.
Thank you for your wonderful review and god bless you blue :)

[Blue]

You are always welcome, of course.

[Tina Louise UK]

Yup me too...prob stay up till 4am every night/morning....enjoyed :) x

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

hehe :P thank you for your review hun :)

[Caradoc]

Wh-wh-whooo-whoo!

I would include my name in the night owl list. I'm sure the Cafe is teeming with those like us. My best work seems to occur at night or early in the morning when sleep is attempting to drag me down in its embrace. Today is no exception.

As for this piece, I find it pleasant and entertaining. It is filled with a goodly amount of humor made all the better for most of it is true. Well done.

-Caradoc

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for your wonderful review. I enjoyed reading it :)
HAHA! I think most writers are this way, to much noise during the day to think clearly.
I glad you liked my poem.
Thanks again :)

[Caradoc]

You're very welcome. :)