motoring toward you ( love senryu)

motoring toward you (love senryu)

 

 

 

i am four wheel drive

trapped in a two wheel body

gunning the engine

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/29/15

Reviews

[Tomás Ó C..]

Interesting take... would that make you transmotor? :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...i like that Tomas..."transmotor"...

good one....thanks for stopping by my short poem and giving me a smile.

j.

[Tomás Ó Cárthaigh]

:-) sure we have to have a giggle in life...

[Fran Marie]

Revved up and ready to drive ..hoping for enough go power to complete the task...

Neat senryu..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fran Marie...

j.

[....................]

we all feel like this sometimes, pushing and overheating as we try to make it to that destination...great senryu, my friend...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, my friend.

j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

What an interesting senryu! I agree with Marie, I like the sexual connotations of it...even if it wasn't meant as deliberate, that makes it even more interesting!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kelly...
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

As the motor hums, oil leaks out the passage of time, grin, then the mouth opens and the hum eases itself out into the stratosphere.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

cool reply, Al...thank you, my friend.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Your work sometimes brings out the far end of abstract in me.

[Marie]

I see this--at least I think I see this--as a description of making love...?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

quite possible....thank you, Marie...need to get an oil change...or just finally getting the courage to approach....