a not too novel concept

a not too novel concept

 

 

intelligence can be binding

especially if it is the book kind

 

a word for word life

confinement imprinted in our hearts

 

without page-less whimsy

our souls can be typed into moribund wisps

 

of degenerative matter

that copyrights our brain

 

but leaves no room

for editing.

 

 

erin-cilberto    

8/21/15

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'a not too novel concept'
erin, cilberto,
Jacob,
This was so interesting! Written to present our lives and what we feel and experience as a story a novel. Words like; intelligence can be binding, book kind, word for life imprinted on our hearts, page-less whimsy, typed into moribund wisps, degenerative matter, copyrights our brain, no room for editing.
Soul and mind compared to what it feels like to look our days as a story in the bindings of a book. This to me was really creative. I've been off of here for a really long time and it was neat to read your poem!
Thanks,
Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks so much for your words, Kathy...how have you been?

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Takes more than the adoption of other people's ideas to equip a fully-functioning human being; some adaption and near-instinctual ingenuity are also necessary.
Meaningful bit of work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Jimmy...thank you for that insight.
j.

[B]

The greatest treasure of a man is a mind capable of producing novelty
Thoughts that can't be reproduced by another
and allow for much growth and adaptability

A true intelligent write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and insightful words, Nisreenaa.

j.

[Crispy]

Very cool word plays in this one--and it speaks volumes (right?) to me about how a purely intellectual mind creates a flat existence. We need the other side too! Perhaps sides. That's how we make the protagonist into a round and dynamic character who can unravel their story of life.

Awesome pohm

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Crispy.

j.

[rubie]

there's a huge difference between "book smarts" and "street smarts". ideally, we need to balance them, as one nourishes the other.

love the word play on "binding" and "matter"

such a clever write that rings so true...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Nice write Jacob Reminded me of a saying "to put brain in gear before one speaks!"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good advice too...thank you, andrew.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"A not too novel concept..." Your title speaks as intellectually as your insight, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly...

j.

[....................]

we need to broaden our minds so that we balance our intelligence...the logical and practical with the instinct...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

great notion...if only we could do that more often...thank you, FT.
j.