No Visitors Allowed

No Visitors Allowed

 

 

prolific insanity

uncoiled profanity

uncontrollable stoicism 

 

laughing blankly, a face without twists

smooth blue skin

no goodbyes rendered

 

a white room memo

life escaped from the mind somehow

i called in dead

 

now the excitement's so bland

in a sky of random expletives

i tender my resignation

 

from a menu of last words

capture one last thought

in transit 

 

then visit the gallows

of shallow vocabulary

with my pen a hanging visage

 

before crazy love

puts me away 

for good.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/28/15

Reviews

[Wraith.]

This has to be a favourite of mine, also happens stoicism is a favourite word.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Wraith.

j.

[rutherford]

The power of words dominate. The words lose their power. I like the phrase, "menu of last words". Outstanding.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, rutherford,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Poetic genius Jacob! Lost for words! A terrific piece created, WOW!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.

j.

[Ken Simm.]

I enjoy the staccato flow of thinking here Jacob. The way thoughts are put together into what essentially are individual poems. That is not in anyway to take away from the whole however. The skill shown here in abundance is mesmerising.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ken.

j.

[Desert Knave]

The "gallows of shallow vocabulary" and a complete lack of physical and emotional energy make this a piece that speaks to me. The pen sits till the spirit moves again. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jim.

j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"...then visit the gallows
of shallow vocabulary
with my pen a hanging visage

before crazy love
puts me away
for good."


I'm going to bow down gracefully, and borrow a line from Carly Simon.

"...nobody does it better!"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kelly.

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When the heart is fragile from being broken it is best to hide it away till it is fully healed.
Always enjoy your metaphors good sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale...always appreciate your kind reviews.

j.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Jacob, the last line was my favorite. "Before crazy love puts me away for good." Excellent! Brilliantly executed, and wonderful metaphors.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Anne...

j.

[MelissaAndres]

This is so, well, poetic! I particularly like your lines ' then visit the gallows of shallow vocabulary'. For some reason this stuck out to me. Very nice job!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Melissa.

j.

[MelissaAndres]

You are very welcome!

[Einstein Noodle]

my my my! reminds me mostly of the dread i can't write anymore and the love of writing ... and so for a while we do give it a break ... but recover before its too late ... reading the first lines i thought how much i always appreciate your use of the language ..(its one of the reasons i started and will continue to pursue a better command of great words and creative phrases .. in my about me i state that i suck at cross word puzzles and so took up poetry to keep this mind from Alzheimer syndrome ;)
very interesting title .." No Visitors Allowed" ... glad you do allow a way in through secret passages ... a thought provoking poem for me!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your review is very kind and much appreciated, E.

j.