Face

Face

 

 

soaked with bloated raindrops

that fell from my sky's eye and

became paralyzed on a cheek

of bony impertinence

that won't allow the waterfall to reach

its conclusion.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/20/13

Reviews

[jeannemarie coulter]

pristine view of life in passing...much thought drawn from my read...thank you...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, jeannemarie.

j.

[~]

A clear observation of interrupted sadness. The sky of sadness had to stop, and the face had to be a stoic one enduring immeasurable pain.
it made me swallow hard..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, moonskittles..

j.

[samiha zubair]

An exceptional write. You really have a way to say it all in small words

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, samiha...

j.

[rubie]

i love the simplicity of the title....

sometimes it's a blessing when the grieving process is interrupted; other times, it's the worst thing not to be able to process the grief so we can move on.

great piece!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, rubie...
j.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Even when the tears fall, they do not fall.
Makes me think of an old man with sunken eyes, tears fall but pool in the sockets.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insightful reply, Cherry...thank you.

j.

[Corset]

handcuffs, those emotions that won't allow the water to fall, to pool , to evaporate or to flow to much bigger bodies of emotion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Corset.

j.

[....................]

sometimes a sudden rudeness can interrupt the sadness, impeding it's natural end...well-sad, my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, FT.

j.

[Relic]

Great meter within the lines. Sadness can go on for years. Great poem Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Tim.

j.