floods and foreclosures

floods and foreclosures

 

 

 

 

philosophical clouds

rain demented dreams

lightning strikes in thought patterns

erratic storms of semantics

 

uninsured, cryptic lodgings

damaged retina of the mind

 

the thunderous roar of his voice

just a slight sound of

hushed rain pitter-pattering 

a roof of denial

 

he is distance, and i am here

waiting out the deluge of grief

 

wishing i could fall from the clouds

over his head, 

and tap on his window

like a stray raindrop.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/7/15

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

High-level acid-trip eloquence; a modern Shakespeare post tab.
Dizzying, meaningful and impressive!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review,

j.

[rubie]

i see this as a loose companion piece to the "detours" piece....

emotional storms can bring either clarity or destruction in their aftermath. i think it depends on our initial preparation....

i love your use of language and word choice here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Talk about a real beauty in semantics!

"Tap on his window like a stray raindrop".......what a great line!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Al

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

when philosophy clouds over ... where is the direction ... when leaders abuse diction ... who can swim the tide .. i would like to tap his window with a boulder of consternation ;}
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.

j.

[olla]

sometimes I wish heaven would install Skype...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes....that would be interesting...

thank you, olla...

j.

[olla]

I am sure they would block my calls..

[Chris]

Through three readings my mind ended on window... such is the strength of your vision.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visions of poetry...you read with tremendous insight...

j.

[Chris]

I treasure those willing to stand before and guide others to find the best within.

[W.k.kortas]

Inclement weather hasn't been this good since Lena Horne. Wonderful use of the language, tightly drawn and inventive metahphor, wonderfully visual--it's the erin-cliberto trifecta.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind with your review, thank you, W.k.

j.

[Cat]

This is amazing. Your word choice is incomparable, yet doesn't overshadow the themes and meaning. Great.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cat.

j.

[An owl on the moon]

Brilliantly turning skies drift through your thoughts, these magic metaphors of storms and souls. There is such a mystery that unfolds in the lines, a movement and sound that stir the mind and emotions.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Craig...

j.

[gabrielle]

What a way to illustrate turbulent emotions. Reminded me of the five stages of grief.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.

j.