the call

the call

 

 

you are guilty of encroachment---

making your move too soon

but your only penalty

will be kisses

under the watchful eye

of a referee moon.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/21/15

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

love is the most powerful thing we can know ... its in youthful risk taking that we make our greatest and most fatal moves ... i fully appreciate this ends with kisses ... such a positive note!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ...........

[Belle]

You are so young at heart, Jacob. Adorable! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Belle...

j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is playful and flirtatious in tone and is just adorably cute. I think that's the kind of penalty I'd be up for anytime.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Linda Marie.

j.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like it, it describes how a person's subconscious was able to perceive how love was captured without being able to explain it. Similar to love at first sight.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, my friend.

j.

[alifeacoustic]

This seems to be said with a smile Jacob, like the one who made the move too soon wasn't only forgiven, but thanked for doing so.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah ha....maybe true...thank you for your read and words, alife...
j.

[annalysiar]

Short and smooth very nice

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, annalysiar...

j.

[...]

Damn Jacob, this is kinda sexy :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, lynn...
j.

[Michael Oliver]

I like this - so simple - perfect

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Michael...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Hey Lover!

How many kisses will this "Hurry Up" Gal get? I trust this won't interfere with your writing!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...you are too funny, my friend...thanks Al.

j.

[Tiana]

Loved the romance with a few short words in this great poem, J!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words, Island Woman.

j.

[Tiana]

my pleasure, J ...