the little shop of second hand emotions

the little shop of second hand emotions

 

 

you drive me to pleasant

insanity,

a cuckoo conundrum

i am significantly consigned to your love

 

like i am borrowing shelf space in your heart

selling myself to your eyes

and you keeping every penny of my thoughts

such a beautiful proposition,

 

 

let's close the shop

draw the shades,

and divvy up the proceeds.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/25/15

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

"Cuckoo conundrum" brings to mind the pseudo-intellectual who hired a psychiatrist to fix his cuckoo clock.
Also, I see you've committed the grave grammatical sin of ending a sentence (despite the comma) with a "proposition."
Otherwise, good poet, yours is a crackerjack of an offering.
Outstanding!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha....on the proposition....thanks for the words, and the smile

j.

[...]

Shaking my head at your endless flow. "Cuckoo conundrum?"...:-) Love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn..

j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Is it a wonder that poetry is the language of love? This poem emotes so perfectly all those things that are otherwise left unsaid in normal discourse. Love!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Linda Marie.

j.

[Anand Sehgal]

very nice write and emotive words :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Anand...appreciate your kind words.

j.

[ANTO]

Like jesserose before me, I too loved the phrase 'cuckoo conundrum" - it just continues to bounce down the infinite stairs of the mind like a slinky long after the reading has concluded.
It reminded me of a song that my friend's father used to sing at family gatherings 'The Candy Store' - ahh, I hear evreyone now shushing the throng to hear it -
"shush....' Jacob is singing...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, ANTO---

j.

[jesserose99]

Totally unique. I had to go shopping after reading the first line. I wanted everything there. Just filled with charm. 'A cuckoo conundrum'...it's not just the alliteration it's so clever. Delightfully sweet read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,

j.

[annalysiar]

Great poem wonderful verses,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, annalysiar...

j.

[Valentine]

Love it...especially the last verse. Good one Jacob. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kathie.
j.

[Autumn Lyric]

Oh very excellent reading of this piece. the title certainly fits the content that is full of the emotions of love; the kind of "in the heat of the moment need" to express and seal that love....enjoyed your expressions used here, for I could see everything being played out along with the desire that grew in the heart within each line of creative expression.

Could also be seen as a double entendre: of a greedy shop merchant that is very emotional over of his lovely shop making proceeds, filling another type of need...

depending on the mind of the reader.

Another great write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like both avenues you traveled ....thank you for your insights, LaShaye...

j.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

thoroughly enjoyed this brilliant piece... lovely write :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Anurag...

j.