Leakage

Leakage   

 

 

when it comes to your love

my heart is like a screen

trying to stave off a pelting rain

 

i have no storm window defense---

 

you are the torrential difference

that floods my emotions.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/2/15

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Great simile.
Many have had a "Stormy" in their lives; an actual or potential mate who's simply emotionally overwhelming.
Brilliant staging!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, Jimmy,

thank you...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I take it their is no umbrella in this romance. This is surely a love where one can catch a nasty cold. Please take two aspirin and call me in the morning.

And please no sneezing on your poetry pages. We love your writing but do not want a cold.

Your nurse,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sorry, Nurse Al...already have the cold...

but a beautiful day for tennis.....45 degrees and calm winds...no clouds...can't wait to get out there in a couple hours.

thank you,

j.

[alifeacoustic]

We are all more fragile and vulnerable than we think. Everything and every one has a weak point, which will shatter under the stress it takes. Great write Jacob, poignant, but very true.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nice insight, as always...appreciate your words, alife.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Nothing quite like being pampered in love only becomes difficult if its not balanced!

[Zugzwang]

Well, sounds like this is one rain storm you're not too worried about trying to avoid.
I like the title...sounds ominous, but the contents are exulting. A pleasant surprise.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Zeitnot...
j.

[redzone]

ah Jacob, let it rain, let it rain, enjoy the deluge... you may have met your match there Jacob from "mad love" to "down pour" I think you caught the "love bug".. ;0)

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curt...

j.

[Dhaye]

Yes, I agree that this is powerful in its conciseness.
When a person is in love, his/her heart will be overflowing with such feeling like his/her heart is bursting with so much love.

I can relate here, sir. Glad to read sweet and inspiring poems today. Thank you for sharing this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dhaye...

j.

[marilyn 1225]

LOVELY AND SO WELL WRITTEN SHORT AND POWERFUL

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, marilyn...

j.