Too Long

Too Long

 

 

in a drawer of my heart,

a keepsake thought of you,

 

the blaze in your eyes

on a silver chain of memory

 

the charm never tarnishes

but that drawer gets awfully hard to open

 

in time

when the tinder tenders

resignation of 

 

self.

 

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/18/15

Reviews

[David Scott]

The stickiness of it all...
Is it worth even trying to open the past? I don't know. A write I can feel.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, David...sorry you can feel it so well...can be painful eh?

[David Scott]

Indeed... Might as well sell it all in the next yard sale without emptying out the dresser.

[V]

Emotional, strong write. I like the short and simple ones which tell so much. This definitely does.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, mimi...appreciate your comment...i always feel less is more..

j.

[V]

I often feel that way, too. ;)

[B]

I guess we can't always have full access without full consent
when it comes to emotions

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Nisreen...

j.

[Troy Henson]

if only what lay ahead was a certainty. What memories we keep are a reminder of who we are and the journey we have travelled.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Troy....thank you,

j.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Very emotional piece Sir.... ...how often we keep the memories and cherish them till infinity in some corner of our heart....wonderful write....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Anurag...
j.

[poet_feefee]

What a great line, "the charm never tarnishes". It is such a great connection. What about the charm that becomes more beautiful with age? The more time that passes, the more you forget about all the dings and scratches.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, that is so true, poet_feefee....thank you...

j.

[samiha zubair]

Its true how passionate we feel towards something dictates our approach in to handling it. A good choice of words

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, samiha..
j.

[Daydreamer]

It's crazy how we so long to come together. No promises for tomorrow but the barriers will still exist.
A beautiful write! Thank you for sharing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Daydreamer.

j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hope your mom enjoyed the book!

[Daydreamer]

She did, thank you so much!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Melancholy but beautiful.
To feel so deeply is both a curse and a blessing.
Stunning poetry!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy,

j.

[William Gardner]

Love the way you leave it, always a strong closer. I wish I knew more about why the drawer gets harder to open? You don't lose the drawer, it just becomes useless (or unused).

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think, harder in the mind, than anything else...thank you for your words, William,

j.