not available in stores

not available in stores

 

 

when you offered me your love

for a coupon

i was out to lunch,

so you clipped my heart out of your paper impression

 

when i finally realized what i had

time ran out

and you were no longer a participating lover

so i paid the full price

 

 

lonely white paper

empty of sentiment.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/20/16

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

aint it the truth! sometimes we just miss out ... serendipity shopping requires more than one when in the love isles :)

E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does, E.---thank you for your words,

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .................

[alifeacoustic]

Those limited time offers seem to have a way of running out just as the checkout is in sight, then they somehow magically increase to more than their original price, leaving us with pockets full of paper memories and empty wallets. Superb and imaginative write Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights, alife...thank you for the visit.
j.

[B. Boileau]

The cost of love is far from free, when discounts are made and your unsure, it becomes buyer beware. Sometimes you never know what you have until it's too late and than the sale is over so it was never ment to be.

Yet another amazing write.

b

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, bill....

j.

[Autonomous]

This is very intense, in the single first phrase you had me enticed and by the end it was heartbreaking. No one deserves for their emotions to be toyed with.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Zwsed

j.

[gabrielle]

This reminded me of Avril Lavigne's "Skater Boy". Perhaps, self-entitlement makes us look down on the offer of others thinking that the same is not good enough. But then again, circumstances change...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such insightful words...and yes, circumstances eventually change...
thank you for your review, gabrielle.
j.

[highonwords]

when you loved me, i didn't love you back - but you still loved me anyway - when i had, finally, fallen in love with you, you all ready had fallen out of love with me - i ache for you, but there is nothing more that i can do

what great writing, jacob - the poem spoke to me in a pristine language your poems are all about

steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words, steph....

j.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, my friend :)

steph

[Bacchus]

This reminded me of when Nicole Kidman was on Jimmy Fallon.

I hate coupons, though.
Just tell me what it costs. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that...yes, just tell me.

thank you, Bacchus

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Paid the full price indeed. Often this is the case, that we don't realize what we had till it is too late.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is true...thank you for your words, KL.
j.