taking the house for a walk

taking the house for a walk

 

 

placate,

then vacate,

hearts live in transient station

 

pay the rent, 

don't buy into love

or that abhorrent trust in gratification

 

movement staves off 

the mesmerizing involvement

and picket fence expectation

 

while the dog makes a mess

in the back yard of memories

a little house of hope faces demolition…

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/20/16

Reviews

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

What can I say or convey that hasn't been mentioned? Perfectly penned

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rico.
j.

[Tbear]

This one resonates...we live in a disposeable society for sure, even love is thrown to the way.. you have such a lovely way with words... write on..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Tbear.
j.

[iand63]

we are what we eat, we are what we wear, we are where we live, which all goes to show we are not who we thought we were......are we?

Do we ever find a permanent stop in our journey through life, through realities? interesting observations J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, ian

j.

[John D'alquen]

The title alone is very creative.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John.
j.

[Poet]

Many move in with aspirations only to find they are mirages. Its not easy. Great writing. The last line sums it all up perfectly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Rain.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes time to move on, a house of memories go with the love exited A clever title jacob, a clever write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew. appreciate your visit and insights.

j.

[Autonomous]

I love it, not much more I can say. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Zwsed...

j.

[Bacchus]

I don't know what to say yet... but keep coming back to it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

well, i do appreciate that you come back....

[Bacchus]

this poem makes me feel like I'm going through the motions and missed the joy that is supposed to happen within the walls... emptiness and crappy instead
you took us there well, my friend!

(side note-I've been meaning to write about dog crap myself... after a beautiful fallen snow how they uncover every last pile... and relate it to depression.... thanks for the reminder!)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is definitely another favourite of mine. I very much equate it to my own life, in terms of building a home with family or maintaining a house is a very different thing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words and sharing your insights, my friend.

j.

[icelandicblue]

Even the sturdiest structures require TLC. Not all storms provide rainbows when they are over. This poem is sad...

"Life used to be so hard," but so often the verb tense is more present than past.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they do require TLC...to be refurbished...thank you for your words, Anne.
j.