soft step

soft step

tip-toe into love

keep your balance

a ballerina's pose,

pirouette slowly, very slowly

if the dance director smiles

you will fall into your partner

on the final turn

and fuse as one

from the improvisation

your hearts.devise.

erin-cilberto

3/27/16

Reviews

[Cherrie L Bill]

The dance takes all you have and you and your partner give to it and in doing so you discover more and the dance of living begins.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an insightful review...love your viewpoint, Cherrie...

j.

[Bacchus]

I'd share a piece like this with your lady- when it's time. Not the gushing one... lol
I like this one a lot.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bacchus...:)))

[Lyn Anderson]

much more romantic and soft -- almost seems a little hopeful, this dance.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KL...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

lovely jacob! i see her softly turning ...with an eye for "God is love" ... we are directed sweetly to fall .. really like this one a lot ..very romantic! peaceful even ... its refreshing to read as the jagged edges of love are the more motivating for artists eh!? :)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your what you said here,E...yes, it seems harder for poets to write love...pain just comes more naturally...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..................

[Lydia Shutter]

And every dance is just a tiny bit different! Wonderful metaphor and flowing lines in this one, Jacob. You are in first place with this poem...and it is well-deserved! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi...

j.

[DIVYA]

I felt the slow and fluid motions of love moving gracefully to its hopefully happy culmination. As much depends on providence as on our compitability in this fateful dance. A poem so appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, DIVYA... you are so kind in your review...

j.

[TheRaven]

It's been a while (years) since I've been to a ballet and it's too bad because the grace of excellent dancers is such a beautiful thing to behold. Dance director was such a brilliant choice of wording. I don't see it as a literal director as much as I see it as fate/destiny or simply love. If love smiles, if it is meant to be, the two will fall together in the final turn. This crazy, improvised thing called life has a funny way of making us dancers collide. Your pen surely danced in this one, Jacob. Thanks for sharing this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh i really like your insightful interpretation...thank you for that...and your kind words...

j.

[Ruth]

A tender warning, almost...the fragility of love visceral and palpable :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Poppy...

j.

[Adam Adams]

So you here capture a great picture of ballet in words keeping things clear, simple & vividly reading around. Seemed, two lovers dancing over the night & "neighbourhood" (dream catcher) watching them dramatially with an eye of love... & awaiting when she bows down to feet & he stands up to capture her like a bird, smothering. Very nice imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Adams...

j.

[highonwords]

wow - what a very graceful and delicate turn on love, jacob - you are the master poet, directing love to dance and turn around for us, your readers :)

best,
steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, steph...

j.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, my friend :)

regards,
steph