Sanctuary

Sanctuary

 

 

 

i sought refuge into you

my camouflage,

but the colors were substitute

they say "love the one you're with"

but in the safety of your heart

i was merely a moment away

from being somewhere else

 

and you deserved more than a house guest

for an emotionally busy weekend

you opened your door to me

and i accepted,

on false pretenses,

 

dreaming of a wilderness

chasing a prey

i knew i would never catch.

 

thus i step across your welcome mat

now,

reading it

and me,

upside down.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/28/16

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Loving the one you're with is fine if both parties know what the "rules" are. To be with someone because you know you will never have the one you want is cruel to the one you're with. Great metaphor. Lydi**

[Philip Muls]

On false prensenses...I like the overall feel of your poem very much. A double agenda.

It has a raw honesty, cruel intentions, no regret.

Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Philip...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is so good, on multiple levels. Don't we all feel, at times, like we are being disingenuous when it comes to love, especially when we have been around the block a time or two?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i totally agree, KL....thanks for understanding crazy me.

j.

[Bacchus]

reading the welcome mat and you upside down-
really good ending to this one...

camo-
hunter stopping by-
in a false wilderness
where the prey... is already caged?

i liked it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Bacchus...
j.

[Miss Sharon]

This is pure magic my fellow wordsmith! (in the safety of your heart i was merely a moment away from being somewhere else) I've know that feeling many times my dear friend. I feel honored to be able to read your words and feel your thoughts. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Sharon.

j.

[Nisreen]

I sense an awful sense of guilty
Seeking refuge in a shelter
its not a choice

while real love
is

so the writer seeks sanctuary
thinking this is futile
and i need more

i guess

thats my take on this one

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Nisreen...you see into my works.
j.

[Matching Socks]

There are those who will always be our shelter when what we really long for is the storm.
But the storm never lasts and the shelter will always be there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, so true, thank you for your insightful words, Ana.

j.

[Georgina Cross]

I love the last stanza of this poem, it's so beautifully written. It's a very interesting concept of stepping over the line.
Its a poem that hits me, yet i don't understand why. The distance is... mesmarisinig.
Fab!
Georgie.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Georgie...

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

One never knows where sanctuary will be found. Could do with some on my end. First-class write as always, Jacob:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pryde.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

emotion starved and emotion jailed ... the dichotomy of men as we bob and weave but won't stay in the ring ;) ... a complex intelligent poem says i! ...speaks to many interpretations.
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.

j.