nothing left for that rainy day

nothing left for that rainy day

 

 

 

swiftly accumulating a piggy bank

filled with coins of regrets,

life hasn't made the sense

i hoped it would...

 

saving memories seems a trifle now

all i spent on love, in love and about love

no money back guarantees for the heart

we put steep down payments on emotions

 

and then live broke on the interest,

or better yet, the disinterest,

 

hardly a quarter left for the gum ball machine

we stroll down memory lane

panhandling for a few golden smiles

but copper facsimiles is all we get

 

and a ceramic belly bloated 

with compunction.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/10/16

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

Great write, if we could put a price on love, what would it be. To begin, you run together. At the end, you walk away.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true true, thank you, Paul.

j.

[Dylan Kerr]

Wow I really loved this Jacob! This line especially really hit me "no money back guarantees for the heart" very well written, read a few of your other poems so far. Really enjoy reading your work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dylan..

j.

[aLittlePain]

Flawless metaphor, very clever! R x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rach.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Every loss comes at a cost well after the event, A clever write Jacob, Yes how we bank on the piggy back of loves.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew..

j.

[Ara Mosby]

An interesting metaphorical journey through life, love and loss... This is one of those pieces that speaks on multiple levels, and I like the originality of the ideas. We do often find ourselves living "broke on the interest,/or better yet, the disinterest", and that is a difficult place to be. I feel this one...well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ara.
j.

[Cassie]

WOW!!! You are a master..I like piggy bank of regrets,new phrase learnt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Usually a full piggy bank would be a good thing. But apparently, not always. Excellent use of metaphor with relevance to our current economic and political situations.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KL..

j.

[Carolynn]

It sounds like that piggy bank needs to be cracked open and spent on something frivolous - such a witty write as usual :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carolynn....:)

[1VJ]

Oh piss-poor in the romance department. Can't live off disinterest. Your writing is always relatable, yet written in such a clever way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paloma!

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

and then live broke on the interest,
or better yet, the disinterest,

Brilliant line here, Jacob! We spend it all on love and don't realize we might need to keep a little in reserve. Again, a clever metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi..

j.