forensics

forensics

 

 

 

evidence,

lip smear,

the collar hot

the damage done

the perfume isn't hers

but now she sees his cologne is stale

 

the scent of love gone bad

wild oats are sown into a leather jacket

that has hung upon another's chair

and he's three sheets to the wind

none of which she launders the next morning

 

the case is closed

as is her door,

and the lipstick stains

are his to shout out

but she will turn a deaf ear.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/01/16

Reviews

[Diamond]

The picture is vivid of a wild fight and close down of a marriage. The symbolic description of fading love is beautiful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Queen.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

You paint a clear picture of a man cheating on his wife here. "Lipstick on your collar, told a tale on you" as Connie Francis sang in our youth. "shout out" good play on words here. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.

j.

[barleygirl]

The idea of "forensics" is brilliant & then you flesh out the details with so many familiar observations . . . the narrator's disgust can be felt as gradually escalating while evidence stacks up. Gotta love your twist on the old saying "3 sheets . . . "

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl.

j.

[tanmay7551]

Right out of the sack, miracle follows! Just that kind of a day when once is just waiting to be stalked with all evidences that shouts his name.

Thanks J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, tanmay.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Devastating.
Your masterful metaphors mercilessly convict the guilty.
Although, "love gone bad" and her "deaf ear" imply that--at some point--he may have felt justified in getting back at her by, tragically, dishonoring himself.
A stunning piece, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and insightful review...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

yield to temptation and feel the wrath of being caught, excellently written j

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...

j,

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I've always been one to want to know the truth, but I've learned that it doesn't slow the pain...that it doesn't forgive the anger....it makes you a different person....sometimes...I wonder....if I should a chose the fantasy.....just sometimes....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just sometimes...yes, me too, Queenie.

thank you.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Feels noir, B&W with great shadows.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.

j.

[Tony Jordan]

When he (or she) falls for the grass on the other side it's best that the field is mowed. New growth may be possible but it'll never be as green and lush as that first perfect lawn.
A metaphorical masterclass j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Tony.

j.