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i'm the hanging indent

on your Work Cited page

waiting for you to italicize my heart

get rid of the quotation marks

which make me only the smaller work

inside the container

since i am filled with you,

why not stronger inclusion?

and why am i always on the second line of your entry?

last on your list, romantically?

three spaces between us rather than two

within the confines of your affections,

you use me more often than others,

the citation referred to the most

and yet?

you nearly plagiarize me

with little or no credit

when it comes to expressing your love.

erin-cilberto

5/19/17

Reviews

[emmajoy]

I swear you're an alien with a different mind-set and vision from most! You delve words, you juggle thoughts then - darn me - you lay them in near majesty. So much so, i don't always understand.

However, I do know fine phrasing when i see it, ' . since i am filled with you, why not stronger inclusion?' also, 'and yet? .. you nearly plagiarize me .. with little or no credit .. '

Why does that smile me? Maybe it strikes me as tongue in cheek, intending to ruffle feathers"!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha yes...ruffling feathers---maybe subconsciously...
but the English teacher in me...oh well...we are what we are, and write what we write, don't we?

thank you, Emma...really appreciate your words.
j.

[emmajoy]

If we write for anyone other than self, we've surrendered our spirits to linguistic commerce commerce ! Or summat!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Pow!-last three lines cut to the bone-"you nearly plagiarize me..with little or no credit..when it comes to expressing your love." Wit, wit, wit-Jacob, I don't know how you do it-but I wish I could too! Alas, I'll keep wishing and reading....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Annette.
j.