Rain

Rain

 

 

fortune teller's blues

chaotic love life back tracks

palm's lines cloud over

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/1/17

Reviews

[eeyore250]

who knows what is next to come? Blinded by negativity?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good questions...thank you for your visit eeyore.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Bad moon rising.
Don't touch the Tarot Cards; keep your hands in your pockets; avoid crystal ball gazing.
Prospects are bleak--better not to know.
Lay low; find a tin roof and listen to the rain.
Intriguing senryu!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply is so poetic, reminds me of the Lovin' Spoonful..."you and me underneath a roof of tin"read moreyour reply is so poetic, reminds me of the Lovin' Spoonful..."you and me underneath a roof of tin"
"we can sit and dry just as long as it can pour"

j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

The lines lead to....? We know what was but who really knows what will be? And then the clouds/rain/tears(?) alter perception....Very thought-provoking piece. Perfect.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Annette
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

and a storm will follow washing away all tracks. Will we ever find home?

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hope so....thank you, al...

j.

[Bare trees]

Searching for answers yet not finding them from the only hope available. Even gypsies are unreliable when the heart is aching for what or who it so desperately wants.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Glass Moon.
j.

[ms. barrie]

eloquently poignant, i love the mystique element (occultism) weaved through this. very evocative of one good at giving advice, yet has a hard time following their own. (at least that's how i read this) -- your gift for words, and unique dictation always leaves an indelible impression upon the reader.

i love the title as well, the last line is stunning!

thank you for sharing,
-- xx -- barrie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, barrie....
j.