Chloroformed Sentiments

Chloroformed Sentiments

 

 

 

and then,

encapsulated love

will shatter the glass

 

we will see ourselves for what

we really are,

and then,

 

hands caught in the jar

will connect

and the scolding will include a summation

of kisses

 

and then,

the verdict

 

we will pick up the pieces

trying not to cut ourselves

on the sharp memories

that made our love bleed.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/31/19

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

I can not help myself I have a very cutting personality I got it from my 1940's Madison avenue grandmother she was as sharp as they come and i was constantly around her in my younger childhood...it did rub off I'm afraid. I do it without even thinking about it and if you don't know me it can come across as mean. But in truth I'm just very ironical and my blade cuts me deeper than my interactions with others so as usual i cant say anything brief when juxtaposed with another of similar frame the fireworks can get rather bright:) I have had to learn to be more conscious of this element in my relationships in the past.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing about your grandmother...she sounds like a sharp one...and you are as well, my friend...i understand where you are coming from, for sure....thank you for visiting this older piece...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Fascinated by your title here Jacob. Chloroformed Sentiments, makes me think of emotions sort of snuffed out. I also got the feeling here of two people both with their own faults, trying to override them and call a truce.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your spot on review, Chris.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

A bulls eye. My aim isn't often that accurate :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

more so than you may think, my friend.

[Guruji]

A very emotion packed poem that stirs our conscience on human essence.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Guruji,
j.

[David Klay]

So thick with metaphors and yet so perfectly written that it has a major impact on the readers thoughts about love and lovers. Great write, jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, David,
j.

[Franco]

The title and the general theme of the poem has a nice juxtaposition. Clever and creative.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Franco...appreciate your visit and words on this piece.
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is best to remember the good things you got out of a relationship. That way your heart is open for new love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale...appreciate your words..
j.

[Wondering Mind]

I see your Muse has returned, or do you have more than one?!
Very effective imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Wondering Mind...just one i think...but she is in complete control...i just follow...
read morethank you, Wondering Mind...just one i think...but she is in complete control...i just follow...
j.

[barleygirl]

I love how the word "chloroformed" conjures up something dead & preserved. I love how your message seems to suggest that a memory confined to a tidy jar is bound to bust out & become embellished by the passage of time. This can apply to actual death & also can be seen as the death of some connection (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Margie.
j.