Ceramic Curtsy

Ceramic Curtsy  

 

 

my heart,

a porcelain urn

holding the ashes

of dear departed friends

 

and loves that crashed and burned

as well,

sitting on the mantle of memory

i hear a song

rising like a Phoenix

 

my heart,

a porcelain yearn

for those who went before me

and those who sent me packing

 

i'm a suitcase with handles

too hot to touch

baggage borrowed from God

paying extra fees

 

my flight into sadness

a window seat

the urn awaiting my return

 

sitting on the mantle of memory

songs with words unheard

and loves that crashed and burned. 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/30/19

Reviews

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

i'm a suitcase with handles
too hot to touch
baggage borrowed from God
paying extra fees

Wow! such deep lines here, I really like this write, it's quite intriguing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kesch.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

a man curtsies to God .. accepts sadness as his lot :(((((((((((((((((((((((((((( i wanted the suitcase to take him somewhere else .. a gypsies journey perhaps ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that would have been nice, yes.
love those gypsies...and their independence

thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! me too! :)

[Ana B.]

A very emotional write dear Jacob. Powerful impact on the reader, as always very inspiring, even it resonates with melancholy. But life really DOES have to teach us those lessons, ins't she ....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ana,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This is such a sad poem to read Jacob. Pulls at the heartstrings. Brilliantly written but sadder than sad. First stanza holds very powerful imagery. Wonderfully expressed.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

My eyes 'glazed' over at the title lol. The first stanza has such a powerful image that the rest of the allegory simply flows from it like melting chocolate.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John,
j.