In Syndication

In Syndication

 

 

 

 

deeply set eyes

proposing

something of hidden agenda

 

buttons and zippers

not withstanding

there is love behind the denim smile

 

and she is curling up her cuffs

in my direction

as i undo my pride

 

and fall back into

her arms.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/31/19

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Sounds like young lusty love between two willing teenagers in their denim jeans out to experiment and enjoy the thrill of getting carried away before the guilt sets in. Buttons and zippers and much fumbling here. That takes me back :) Well done Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris,
j.

[Patricia]

subtle and sexy in just a few words, bravo!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you!

[R.E. Ray]

Reads like "sin-dication" J. I see two youngsters, or maybe a random hookup, each saying whatever needs said to get past the denim. No matter the players or the place, someone will likely regret unzipping and shedding their pride. Maybe? :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very insightful...thank you for your words, R.E.
j.

[Laura Kate]

'there is love behind the denim smile' ... amazing. Mustn't this thought cross everyone's mind at some stage in the romantic games and dances? Especially at early stages, perhaps more importantly at later stages. Big fan of this one. I love the sense of danger and uncertainty yet it's all happening anyway as if there's no control, or perhaps surrender to it...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Laura....
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This takes me back to the uncertainties of young love as we toy with it but feel timid at the same time, feel almost apologetic for feeling stimulated even though we hope in those eyes is a mutual friend. And as you withdraw tail between your legs she summons you and brings you to heel.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i am dumb enough to heel....oh well.
thank you for your insightful words, John,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... this tops Neal Diamond's song,
"Forever in Blue Jeans". I hid behind my
Geisha Fan while reading your poem...
but enjoyed the hidden meaning ever
so much. truly a Gem of a romantic smile.
truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat,
j.