the final punctuation

the final punctuation

 

 

it's my title

but it can be your words if you choose

 

i don't need credit

just love

 

and a couple words of sentiment

sent my way

 

it's my title

but it's your ending

 

i'd like to be there

before the period

 

and inside the quotation marks

where we both belong.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/25/19

Reviews

[gram linski]

the full stop, the objective subjective, inside quotations, looking for exclamations, a playful use of language, with poetic style

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, gram,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I really enjoyed this one. We all have a story and those who are part of it, are special people. No one knows just how that story will be written, do they? We have to find out our roles and play them. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Lydi.
j.

[kentuck14]

Excellent in its brief picture of a desired relationship. This is an example of Jacob at his best!!! Thanks.
T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, T,
j.

[Lorry]

I really like how you do this Jacob. I would be happy with writing one of your lines, but you just keep them coming.
Being there together, before the final period is superb. It is what we all hope, that it will all work out in the end. Hope, plans or just wishful thinking, it's what gets us through all the rest of life's crazy journey we call life.
I may have a lot of explaining to do before that last dot 😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i will have much explaining to do as well, Lorry...
thank you for the visit and understanding.
j.

[h d e rushin]

so characteristically Jacob by which the reader and the narrator rigorously fit within the same sentence.
quotation marks mean an exact-dance; a strategy. Perhaps even a formation.


"I'd like to be there"

is a wish out-loud for access to such complex adaptations, like love
or even like getting along. Wonderful!

love poems I have to learn how to write.....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, dana,
j.

[Neville]

another great poem jacob..and where you say so much more than is immediately obvious...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Neville,
j.

[R.E. Ray]

"Inside the quotation marks" is the ideal reference, J. That's certainly better than a footnote, the little print in the back that nobody sees. Well written, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that..."better than a footnote" and a great title for a poem...thank you for your words, R.E.
j.

[BlackRose]

Ah, to love in the confines of the words. To be there side by side in each sentence after the next. To have it last longer than a novel. Love this simple yet powerful piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, BlackRose,
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I love how this makes it all seem so simple and easy, nothing to complicated, just love. One would hope to end it with a shining mark of exclamation. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Linda,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Clever metaphor here Jacob. A wish as well as an invitation for some togetherness before time runs out. You aren't asking for much, some love and a couple of words of sentiment. I would say that is an offer well worth the taking. Touching sentiment in this write. Very well conveyed.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.