outlook

outlook

 

 

 

drink the poison words

God flew south for the winter

eyes cast toward the ground

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/29/19

Reviews

[Stephen F Brewerton]

Dynamic write. --- Stephen

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Brewerton,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Powerful. Says much about the awful state we find ourselves in. So much hate and vitriol, that even God has taken flight and gone south for the winter months.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris...
j.

[conversations with her ..]

Wow,

I really enjoyed this poem, so short yet tasteful.

I look forward to reading more of your pieces. Great read!

I recently just posted 4 new poems on my page: Restless, Free-flowing, a stranger to self, and mistress.

when you get a chance, let me know what you think... Id love to hear your feedback!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jada,
j.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a painful chill that flows through your lines. Drinking down the poison words, the thoughts of this darkness, the abandonment of God's presence, and the lostness of gazing into the earth, downcast and undone. Beautifully bittersweet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Owl,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poison words. Many kinds my friend. You wrote enough in the poem. Thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Rhayne]

I'm sure there's a lot of people in the South that think He's up North. As for me, He's everywhere and nowhere, but I try to keep Him in my heart. I imagine God might be rather disappointed in us as some of us might be disappointed in Him. Hard to say what tomorrow will bring, or even the next hour. Having God's eyes cast to the ground would be a good thing for us, means He's watching us as he flies South----North, East, West. I know, I'm sounding rather religious. I'm not a fanatic, but I do believe.

Wait, you wouldn't happen to be in Montana, would you, j?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Not Montana....Southern Illinois...
thank you for sharing your thoughts and how you related to this one, Rhayne.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am pleased that I have no god elsewise this might depress me Jacob. God abandoning his flock despite all the promises of his minions here on earth. We watch daily so many tragic things and yet we are asked to believe a just god might have a plan?

PS final line 'eyes cast to the ground' makes five syllables?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i know "toward" is in actuality two syllables, but the way it is pronounced generally is as one syllable.
and i wanted that instead of "to"
but appreciate the catch and the question.
thank you for your review, John.
j.