Baptism by Fire

Baptism by Fire

at midnight,

September passed

and October was born

but the heat in the delivery room 

stifling

everyone sweating

and there was much screaming

autumn leaves wrapped in clover

the umbilical branch

cut,

even as the September mourners

walked by the room dressed in receding green

the sudden death perplexing

when the body still seems so alive

and warm...

erin-cilberto

10/1/19

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is impressively imaginative! Wow! The way your metaphor sidles up to your straightforward expressions about this transition . . . a million images & feelings popped into my mind! "heat in delivery room" . . . "umbilical branches" . . . "body still seems so alive" . . . too much awesome word crafting to list! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Margie,
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sometimes time seems impatient and waits upon nothing and no one - seasons are passing before having come to be...time is of the now that’s all we have...another wonderful deeply thought out piece 🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Kelly,
j.

[Michael Oliver]

Ah the classic equation of life and death, only now in my later years does death seem to the real reason for living, everything is aimed at preservation - thumbs up again Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and just making the most of each day....i dealt with stress over the last year...and it really had me tied up....but now...different...i have chilled and realize i am lucky to be alive and still doing what i love.
thank you for your words, Michael.
j.

[VelvetPotato]

Such an interesting and melancholic metaphor, j. "Umbilical branch" was great imagery. It is unfortunate that our fall months are being suffocated with summer heat.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for these words, Velvet.
j.

[Lorry]

Perfectly captures my attitude to the foreboding that is winter, that I might need to go, but I'll be kicking and screaming every inch of the way. But on the plus side, it means I get a seat on the bus all to myself 😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and here i am embracing fall...i just love the cooler weather and the absence of the humidity of Southern Illinios.
thank you, Lorry...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Untimely heat for the season. Sounds like fall is late in coming, while summer stamps her feet saying she isn't ready to go. You baptized with sweat while over here I have had the torrents on the doorstep. Love the metaphor of the delivery room.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris.
j.

[roarke]

ah, so much spoken by not speaking. A master's touch. Magic ensues. 100

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, roarke,
j.