Straw Womb

Straw Womb

 

 

 

splintered impression,

wooden affectation

cold verbiage included

 

warm kisses

knee buckling touch

lips inflamed

 

wings cut

rhetoric blunder

infection under the skin

you are

 

both sides of a frivolous

fermentation

 

something is growing

an us?

or just split fingered decision

 

grounded in haste

as our hearts struggle 

for birth.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/1/19

Reviews

[gram linski]

a schism of frivolous fermentation, it feels like Siamese twins getting ready for the operation. separation, the loss of some kind of something, great poem, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words...and i like that about the Siamese Twins...yes.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I was drawn to the word fermentation. A chemical reaction. Sounds like some excitement here in the form of a new romance. Something is growing, in that soft straw womb. Something out of nothing. It all sounds rather positive Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris

j.

[andrew mitchell]

This reads like the beginnings of new love and the nest without they knowing is in the making.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that andrew...yes...thank you...
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

It seems a rescue from a birth is the solution.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

apparently....thank you, Al.
j.

[Fran Marie]

O h yes..I have to agree with Divya...that something positive may be growing.. I like. the frivolous fermentation line..

nice work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fran,
j.

[DIVYA]

Split fingered decision grounded in haste... yet I sense a something growing, something positive and of passion, reading your words here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, DIVYA,
j.

[PaintedBirdy]

gorgeous writing. i'm envious. "straw womb" as a social construct is brilliant. something is growing. yes! i can learn from you! this rocks because every word is intentional. amazing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mondaine..
j.

[Michael Oliver]

you know this has a quasi religious feel to it - you not turning into theresa of Avilla are you. Liked this a lot certainky warranted several readings and a lot of thought - thanks Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing your time and thoughts in tackling this piece, Michael...
just questioning faith a bit lately for various reasons.
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Ahhh! The passion, the pulse, the impulse that fades. I liked the "splintered impression." I could easily envision the bed made in the straw. Very nice.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Linda...appreciate your words,
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

My pleasure.

[Willys Watson]

As usual for you, this is first, a profoundly written poem with powerful imagery.