Equation

Equation

 

 

random blonde

fiery temperament

infused with beauty

 

his cockeyed lies assume

a pristine manner

in a manner-of-speaking

 

she freezes his advance

as the bitter drifts

cascade on his heart

 

he knows he won't find shelter from this

his breaths few and far between

his eyes, that approached her covertly,

 

lock in on the sky

understanding that his ascension

is an unlikely variable...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/9/19

Reviews

[barleygirl]

One of my brothers, who is a hardcore dork bookworm, very thick glasses & pot-belly . . . he always went for the most unattainable popular girls . . . your poem brings it all back. Back then, I thought him a fool, but looking back I wonder how much is disguised self-preservation? Maybe this was his way of staying alone & safe all his life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate how you resurrect some old pieces of mine....and yes, your story of your brother sounds similar to something i did for years after my first divorce...i got involved in situations that due to different circumstances needed to be short lived....
thank you so much,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh the joys of trying to get attention of someone out of your league... been there, done that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely...thank you, Dale...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Sounds like in her eyes he blotted his copy book and he knows it. No chance of redemption. So well written. Great visuals here Jacob. Could picture this scenario perfectly.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris....
i thought this one completely missed....but now there seems to be some activity with it...
appreciate your visit.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

She was decidedly unimpressed--that attractive blonde with the temper of a red-head.
No, all his sincerest soundings lies would not get him into her panties. (Though, why
he'd want to wear her panties is beyond me.)
Sad story, Jacob, but a great poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your story better than the poem's....thank you, Jimmy,
j.

[Perdition]

Does sound like a swing and a miss but at least there was the try and someday the sky will be an effortless variable. ..Stuck on the "Random blonde"...great opening!!...Wondering if such a creature exists..lol. Thanks J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

actually had a certain one in mind when i wrote it...although she is anything but random...she is a great gal....
and really close friend.
j.

[Perdition]

Yep...experience has taught me there are no "random" blondes...lol. A great opening.

[DIVYA]

An equation with two Ill-balanced sides. He seems presumptuous, she seems bitter and angry, not necessarily just with him. Her disdain and his lies are hardly going to help the equation, however regretful he may feel about it. Says so much about today’s relationships.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words on this write, DIVYA...
j.

[DIVYA]

You’re welcome, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the poem appreciates your attention...it was starting to get a complex...:)

[DIVYA]

Haha. Then I’m glad I got to it :)