Hark

Hark

 

 

 

his hands frozen in prayer

feet in igloo silence

a holy warmth exuded

his message for others eluded

 

walking, melting the path

for those fearful of his wrath

gentle words are spoken

in somber tones broken

 

he retreats to his womb

moonbeams in his pocket

his love, his tomb.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/23/19

Reviews

[PaintedBirdy]

gorgeous write, brother. but it unsettles me that the last verse is only three lines! it feels like something missing but maybe that plays into the pain of this poem.

hark is a religious word. is this about jesus? words like prayer, holy, message, walking. but nobody should be fearful. jesus is love. retreat to womb could mean going back to jerusalum. i dunno. i'm drunk again. i just really love this and how it can make my mind go in so many directions.

thanks for sharing. happy holidays and new years! keep writing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Garcon...it certainly has allusions to Jesus...i appreciate your different perceptions...
Happy Holidays back at ya.
j.

[PaintedBirdy]

happy holidays! nothing but love, brother!

[John the Baptist]

This is a mysterious one. The description seems to be of a religious figure, perhaps Jesus of Nazareth. It's not the usual partisan religious message, though. There are hints of negativity balancing the spiritual aura. He melts the path, but for those who fear his wrath. The last verse may be an indication that the man cannot really be known. A very interesting and disquieting piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and insightful words, John,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

His love, his tomb. This is about Jesus. He died to save us all. He saw love where others saw conflict. A pity more don't have the same aspirations. What a difference that could make.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Wow very deep and meaningful I like how it can be interpreted in so many ways but. What comes to mind is Jesus spreading the good news and in the end he’s in his tomb but there is light in his moonbeams great poem enjoyed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful and kind review,
julie...
appreciate where you took this.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... we all return to the womb,
especially in the Winter of our life.
I do believe that we have the "Bonus" of
another Spring and perhaps Summer...
The answer my friend is blowing in the Wind.
Happy New Year. Gratefully, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, it's Blowing in the Wind...dylan is such a poet.
thank you for your words, Pat,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... Google has Bob Dylan 🎤 singing Blowing in the Wind... what a treasure... almost always it is the Best of times and the worst of times... However, we always have hope... and poetry and music is a way of being reminded ... hopefully to have Hope. findly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

music has been my soundtrack....I also love Peter, Paul and Mary's version of it...I have Dylan's album with that song as well....
yes, we have to have hope...it keeps us going.
j.

[DIVYA]

"he retreats to his womb
moonbeams in his pocket
his love, his tomb."

I'm just soaking myself in the beautiful read...in a feeling of reverence and love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, DIVYA...appreciate your kind comment,
j.

[VelvetPotato]

Wow, that gave me chills. I really admire your ability to portray so much with so few words! (Kind of the opposite of my writes. I suppose if I sacrificed some of my rhythm I could become better at this).

I have to agree with Mondaine and say this is about Jesus. However it could apply to any authority figure that is supposed to be good but that people still fear (like a king, or even a cop... lol) Kind of an interesting twist on someone who is supposed to be virtuous. But it is true, a lot of people fear Him, (or going to hell) at least indirectly.

I like the juxtaposition between the frozen hands, igloo feet / holy warmth. That also contributes to the reader feeling conflicted... is he good or bad?
Also "gentle" yet "somber" words.

So good!!! A favorite!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your words, Velvet...
appreciate where you went with this.
j.