the other Memorial Day

the other Memorial Day

 

 

 

it was cold day in hell

as they say

Sunday morning inching into daylight

the sense of you a weak's end

 

frigid bombardment of feelings

shrapnel sobriety

a drink raised in mid-salute

your coaster an empty nest

 

i sat burning with memory

thirst for love incited

Saturday's sentinel posted outside a heart

jailed in its own bars

 

of hesitation's armistice

with no wrought wars to fight

we were just mere acquaintances

meeting on a platonic battlefield

 

sensual skirmishes ceased

"from here to eternity"

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/22/19

Reviews

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And what a sad memorial day, Jacob.....probably as painful as any metal hitting the meat on a battlefield itself.

As always your consistent flow of metaphors are a joy to read; the war theme is very well done and that final line....perhaps alluding to the film of the same name and its iconic scene on the beach just makes your loss hit that much harder. I guess we all can't be as lucky in love as Burt was in that scene.

Another fine write, Jacob. Merry Christmas and best wishes for the New Year.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, that film, and scene...
thank you for your kind words...Deborah Kerr as well.
Happy New Year, my friend.
thanks for the visit.
j.

[kentuck14]

Like the old song . . . "Who wrote the book of love?" it's an epic like "War and Peace," "A Tale of Two Cities." all the good and bad, happy and sad all rolled into one.
T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh yes, that song...one hit wonder, the Monotones...
great song...
thank you for your words, T.
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The death of a great love can really be felt often on the anniversary of the day you were told goodbye. A great metaphoric reference to express the agony of heartbreak.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dale...
love the pic...Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
read morethank you for your kind words, Dale...
love the pic...Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
j.

[Dave Brown]

Who is this (sweet thing??) that keeps causing you sooo much anguish, and can U ever recover what with eternity and the like?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nobody...just a poem....poets keep a store of memories that make food for poems...thank you, Dave...ah yes, recovery.
j.

[emmajoy]

A superbly 'you' poem, full of the erin-cilberto use of language wrapping around words. Very much a memorial using metaphors to long for, hopefully not to die foR - in spite or the battle between the two un.named characters. Such a sadness, a look back yet fresh as fresh in the mind AND heart. You are so adept in knowing how to express your feelings, jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, em...
j.

[VelvetPotato]

This is the funeral (or memorial) of the one that got away. It makes me sad when two people cannot fulfill their potential to be in a relationship when it could be so great. It is even sadder when one doesn't reciprocate even though the other has true feelings and passion.

I enjoyed how you kept the memorial and war theme consistent, the multiple metaphors, and the play on the word, "weak." Great write, as always!