Impassable Road

Impassable Road

driven to tears,

she searched a rest stop

to dry her somber viaduct

risking the standing water

that was her life.

erin-cilberto

12/25/19

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

This seems like a very sad poem; a person in distress, in tears from somebody or incident, willing to risk her life. I like how you used the word viaduct as a metaphor for drenching tears. Good poem!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Your welcome, I love your writing; it’s a good lesson for an emerging poet like me!

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re teasing!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Viaducts bring to mind tear ducts and "standing water," a life of stagnant stench.
Few words with wide-ranging implications.
Great work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy,
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

Standing water although pretty... tends to languish, best to let it flood once in a while and let the current flow take you where it will... me thinks:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, bunny...you "thinks" pretty astutely...
j.

[kentuck14]

A great metaphor for risk in the face of reality. Rest stops along lonely roads can be dangerous or a place of comfort . . . who knows when we pull off the road!?
T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just like frustrated writers can either be really good or really dangerous as English teachers.
read morejust like frustrated writers can either be really good or really dangerous as English teachers.
thank you for your insightful comment, T.
j.
j.

[kentuck14]

I'm sure you are a fine English teacher!
T

[Einstein Noodle]

soul searching emotive says i! we do need to rest and rehab but staying too long will most certainly get stagnant ... imaging and precise language speaks volumes in this one .. i felt in the car ..
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, E.
j.

[DIVYA]

Tears become a way of life for some and a cessation of tears means a loss of purpose. Sometimes, it becomes difficult to give up what one has lived with for so long. A vacuum, a void is worse.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

tell me about it...thank you for your insightful comments, DIVYA,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

always have loved that word, "cessation"---

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"It's flooding down in Texas, all of the telephone lines are down..." Stevie Ray Vaughan Methinks therein lies the rub; that whole communication thing. Sometimes those who would reach out are too far from shore, or to borrow a Stevie Smith phrase, "not waving, but drowning".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for you're appropriate quotes echoing this poem...
yes, "not waving, but drowning"
and sometimes our lives are doing the same.
j.

[emmajoy]

Sometimes, although sad, it's better not to stop but to keep running? Not sure of the thoughts behind your words this time, but - right or wrong, ja., leaving my immediate reaction!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no right or wrong ever, with poetry...
and i like your "immediate reaction" yes, perhaps to keep running sometimes is best.
thank you, em.
appreciate your visit and interpretation.
j.