too much blue

too much blue

 

 

cloudburst

eyes in mercurial mist

a prodigal sun's

return

a tear's dilemma

the ducts in redress...

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/22/19

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Upstate New York's Winter sun gets pretty prodical.
Figure my neighbors and I will be blue for, at least, three more months.
This will give us more than enough time to get our ducts in a row.
Synchronize, as it were.
Thoroughly enjoyed the read!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even your replies to poems are clever....
so you are upper NY State?
I was Bronx...right in the city...never liked it..but love going through upstate NY on our way to Vermont in summer...when i was a kid.
thank you, Jimmy
j.

[Marie-Louise.]

Dear Jacob...as a mere novice at writing poetry I can see how deep I will have to dig to reach the words I need to express. You seem to touch the kernel with the minimum of words and gain the maximum depth. The prodigal sun’s return... how clever is that!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Marie-Louise,
j.

[Dave Brown]

This took me to a documentary called 'Blue" which Upset me so much I had to cut it of and another called 'Revolution,' both addressing 'Blue' but the blue of the oceans and the genocide taking place there, with the very possible dire consequences

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that, Dave.
even the beautiful color blue can signify death and sadness...
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... many songs have been written about blue...
and yet only a few have surpassed the great beyond
where blue bells ring and angels sing, Glory to God
where Earth abides. truly a spacious sky where we live and die.
truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your positive reply, Pat,
j.

[R.E. Ray]

“A tear’s dilemma”... shine clear blue or express what’s inside and risky the salty redness? Seems the mind’s blue can turn us red outside.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does seem that way...thank you, R.E.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

This is beautiful it can be interpreted a few ways which is what I love about your poems you have the art of not explaining the whole gist of it leaves one in beautiful mysterious clouds of uncertainty
This one takes me to the day of Jesus returning through the clouds to get us
But I can also interpret it other ways too early here it’s just early coffee time

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Ps I may be way off with the religion bit can also see it in parents not seeing their kids too as they grow old

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like both of those interpretations...i thank you for your insightful words, Julie,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

My thoughts here are of the season and reflections on the past. I liked prodigal sun, it made me think about parents separated from their boy. I found these words moving. I felt tears coming here where there may not have been tears before. Christmas is a time when we miss our loved ones most.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate where you went with this...thank you, Chris.
j.

[Ken Simm.]

Not cried outside for an age. But this is what I feel inside. Brilliant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ken.....

j.

[DIVYA]

It feels a bit disappointing when I want to cry but the tears let me down. Somewhere, the blues have faded and the ache isn't so strong any more. Healing can be dull.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have that same problem....seems i can pour emotions into poetry, but it bypasses me first...
movies make me cry...real life for some reason, doesn't.
thank you, DIVYA...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

you can only cry so long as does a broken heart weep. all things heal eventually.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely true, my friend.
thank you,
j.