let us bleed in rhyme

let us bleed in rhyme

you hit me with a blitzkrieg of kisses

i didn't run, didn't duck

just let them find their mark

and now the aftermath

is nuclear glow

and a warmer blood flow

a war won by both

to the victors, breakfast in bed

toast to a rose red

the lying wounded roll over and smile

next skirmish engages the while

we intend to last forever.

erin-cilberto

3/5/2020

Reviews

[Lorry]

This one has a feel of past, present and future Jacob, as words are both bled and thrown like grenades, which is exactly like love... Or have i been doing it wrong.
We can neither outrun love or pain, but at least on the plus side, we are immortal right up to the point it is proven not to be the case, to everyone but ourselves. But best to doublecheck and make sure its kisses or grenades, can't be too careful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Lorry,
j.

[Laura Kate]

Finally! A battle that can be won by both sides!

This is wonderful, I particularly love the imagery of glowing radiance - a body and soul well loved.
Laura.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Laura,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

great hook of a title for all who wander around a site of poets and writers ;) there is a lot i like about this one besides the title tho .. the "blitzkrieg of kisses" .. funny .. instant recall of the two times this occasioned in my love pursuit .. once received and once given .. both surprisingly stamped in memory for me ... the time given was a forever intent .. then came the pain .. the time received ... i knew i would run :} funny thing as i remain good friends with both over 20+ years ... "....the while
we intend to last forever" ....killer line sir ... one of those i wish i had thought of it ... fine read for me jacob ... thanks always for sharing your poetry .. right here at the Cafe'
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review and sharing your blitzkriegs my friend....
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ......................

[Chris Shaw]

Let us bleed in rhyme, completely drawn in by the title because before I even read your lines I was with poetry, and bleeding for my art. Many is the time I have bled in rhyme. And then your lines, and I still found myself focusing on poetry and telling myself regardless of the skirmishes, regardless of the negativity, we intend to last forever. Multi layered poetry, love it, just love being sent on a journey Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris...and for relating to the work....you reminded me in your review of S&G..."many's the time i've been mistaken, and many times confused"
in our younger days...we thirsted for those kisses and sometimes overdid it having no idea that we were and probably scaring the receiver...
j.

[Carolynn]

You can’t get over that “one” once they’ve left they leave a lasting impression of what was, what could have been, and perhaps what still is ... some never find a final resting place - until both are possibly reunited once more or they agree to sever the ties that bind. I’m fidgeting about this one :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Carolynn,
j.