Whitewashed

Whitewashed 

 

 

orange blossom

in winter's harsh country

 

a misplaced seed

of doubt

 

further hampered

since nothing rhymes with it.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/5/2020

Reviews

[Papaya]

An orange blossom would probably blend right in with our winter snow.
Such a pretty thing yet it would go unnoticed unless someone cared to look closely.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana, appreciate your visit and words.
j.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

I think it's brilliant how you form an impression in limited words ,and the way you drop unexpected lines .
It just left a stupid smile on my lips .
love your work:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ankita...appreciate your visit and your words.
j.

[Lia Columbus]

I love your casual style of writing. I have never seen an orange blossom but now that I have read this, I really think I am missing out on something special.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lia,
j.

[AJNJ]

If nothing rhymes with it, make it the centerpiece! Beauty always springs, unexpectedly and oddly. Mostly never fits in.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, yes, thank you, Peston,
j.

[AJNJ]

It was my pleasure!

[Lorry]

Love the last line Jacob. Made me smile stupidly, but then my young neighbour asked what I was smiling at and I told her and she told me I need a new dictionary.
Apparently blorange and dorange are included in some dictionaries now. Blorange is orange/blonde hair and dorange is being lost in a fit of the giggles. Young people eh?
Reminds me of a Stephen Fry tale about school, where the teacher stated that sugar is the only word in the english language that starts with the shoo sound. One bright spark, or smart arse as they are commonly known replied "are you SUre Sir?" 😀
Don't worry though, I gave her the official withering look that being usurped by a whipper-snapper deserves 😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am glad you gave her that look...thanks for sticking up for our generation...
j.

[Neville]

its a fact innit ... and its one of those that everyone seems to know .. I have been known to lose sleep trying to find anything that comes close .. I guess you could say I have my very own misplaced seeds of doubt ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we'll find it somewhere...thank you, Neville,
j.

[Neville]

... pleasure is all mine j.
N.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Indeed, nothing rhymes with "orange."
A psychological poem which refers to more than Nature's beauty.
Still, lovely of form.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This is lovely. I have just penned a poem about seed dispersal. How strange. You know I really like the idea of an orange blossom springing up where you least expect to find it. Barren land with a determined visitor. Doubt is a curse best given the boot.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

reviews at the same time, seed poems at the same time...Twilight Zone...
Yes, doubt needs to be kicked to the curb.
thank you, Chris.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha ...we should all misplace our seeds of doubt ... fooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeevvvvvvvvvveeeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!
I like the orange blossom in a wash of white makes me think of creamsicles of my youth.
hmmmmmm something to rhyme with doubt .........how about darkness? ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I loved
Creamsicles..been years since i had one of those melt in your mouth passions...
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Creamsicles..been years since i had one of those melt in your mouth passions...
thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!! they still make them jacob! but they aren't nearly so creamy ...