articulating

 

articulating

 

 

i loved you madly, gladly

then sadly

in the mist

of the midst

 

of your ease

of breeze

as the leaves returned 

to a madly, gladly

 

then sadly

October's reinvention

of a certain redemption

as we moved to stone.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/4/2020

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Til death do us part. So cleverly written, definitely a smart man’s poem, it has class.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew,
j.

[AJNJ]

How we transition from madly, gladly to sadly and then to stone...I wish it was the reverse!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wish the same, Peston...I wish the same.
thank you,
j.

[AJNJ]

You're mist welcome dear sir!

[Chris Shaw]

This little piece of brevity started with such promise and at the mention of October I new we were heading for a fall. Stone killed the romance dead. So much conveyed in so few words and visual with it Jacob. A sad ending.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, Chris.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Flowing, smooth rhyming play on words that recounts such a sad tale of lost love. This one is pathos packed and short but anything but sweet!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Brings to mind, Medusa.
Desperately sad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy,
j.

[Papaya]

The heat of summer, it cannot last. Things will cool when the seasons change.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very true, Ana...you managed to articulate just fine.
thank you
j.