Custody of a Whim

Custody of a Whim

 

 

chilly breezes blow

from blond tresses

bow to November's calling

 

I loved her into autumn

but her summer's vow to me

ended

 

with the first frost

and I was left 

a statutory bloom

 

arrested, 

duly assumed

to have presumed

 

she was my forever flower.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/1/2020

Reviews

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I like the educational words you used here. Lots of sentiment in these few words. It's an art to write simple deep poetry and you do that well. Enjoyed the read. Tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Cyprian,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Great metaphor here, Jacob. As the seasons change, so do relationships.....sadly. Although the subject is sad, the words are so well written. I could feel them. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi,
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Beautifully put.
You make heartbreak and rejection sound almost noble.
Forever flowers are fake.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like your reply better than the poem, Jimmy.
thank you,
j.