Surrender's Intimacy

Surrender's Intimacy

 

 

 

fractured rhythm

besieged emotions

scatter the beat

 

of my poem

of my heart

of my eloquent retreat.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/8/2020

Reviews

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Whew... this was reminiscent of a piece I wrote years ago. sometimes we get in our own way, scattering the beat till we have to retreat and recover. you have done such with so few words, and its the definition of poetic. Wonderful write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Travis...yes, we sure do get in our own way...much too often.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

I just spoke to Doctor of poetry he says you are suffering from a cluttered mind of entangled thoughts. Probably a bit dry on the words which probably need lubricating, say two maybe three standard drinks should do the trick. Actually this is a good write in itself J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew..and tell Doc thanks.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked these words Jacob.
"fractured rhythm
besieged emotions
scatter the beat"
I enjoyed the above lines a lot and your words danced to understandable meaning. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Patricia]

seriously your writing lately has been absolutely impressive! So much heart and soul and always brilliantly done as this one

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pat,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Emotions do dance to the beat of a fractured rhythm....and it changes minute to minute for some. There are times retreating is the best path.....the safest one! Rhyming....unusual for you. I liked it. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lydi...yes, every once in awhile...I am guilty of the old rhyming thing....

[Light and ashes]

An eloquent retreat, indeed. Thank you for sharing this with us.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Light.
j.