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mama, do you still remember me

 

as your astral mind fades into a strident universe

there is heaven

 

do you see it from a distance

or see distance from it

 

as you try to swipe away the angel dust,

 

still wanting to clean up my room,

and make it a perfect star.

 

erin-cilberto

5/23/2021

Reviews

[Addict With a Pen]

I love when poems are told like a short letter unfolding, a person to write to and an idea to convey- always with a personal touch. This idea of space, stars, uncertain universe; the beyond- a scary place but not in the way you wrote it. It sounds like a place we fade into, not a place we are thrown into. Thanks for sharing this one

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review Addict with a Pen...
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very sweet poem, i enjoyed it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, JungLee,
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

You are welcome

[Miss Sharon]

A wonderfully relatable write for me Jacob. I can still see Mom going from room to room carrying her dust rag...always the dust rag in hand. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for understanding, Sharon.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Oh my, you got the mom thing buttoned up. That's me as well. Fussing around making everything tidy, putting things in their rightful place :) This little poem is endearing. I bet she would smile.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris.
j.

[Trey Jakosalem]

As a growing boy with a dotting mother, I cannot help but chuckle as I see her still scolding me on occasion to keep my room squeaky clean. Thank you, Sir! Very relatable, hahahaha!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Trey,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Ah perfection
Brilliant write dear Jacob
Love it to bits

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Julie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

That’s ok really love it 😊

[Kerra]

Wow, this is emotional and heart tugging...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kerra,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Amazing poem... finding the missing button...
and knowing Mom will sew it where it used to be.
truly, Pat