arose

arose

 

 

 

i purposed you,

 

       forget-me-not petals

 

broke off on their own

 

......................still counting.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/22/2021

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes life just happens and nothing we do can change it. Such a succinct one, Jacob, but it packs a punch. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi,
j.

[Neville]

............. exceptionally bloomin lovely :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, thanks, Neville...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

very clever ... almost too much brevity for me in this one .. i love the ideas and play with words and flowers ... and the theme comes across ... its L3 that i am having a hard time "fitting" ... they broke off on their own .. hmmmmmmmmmmm ... not quite sure what to make of that ... probably will stick in me noodle all day today ...thinking about love and disappointments ;}
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you got it, E.
we usually pull off those petals to decide...sometimes the decision is not ours.
we have no control.
thank you, sir...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhhhhhh! got ya! top o' the mahrnin' sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

top o' it back at ya, sir E.

[Chris Shaw]

Brevity which gifts. Memories of daisies and their petals and the adolescent games we played. He loves me, he loves me not, he loves me, oh those young teenage years.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating, Chris....and good morning.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

When I was a kid around four five we would do the ‘he loves me he loves me not ‘game on a few poor picked flowers 💐
Little did we know back then real love is hard to find
Loved your poem
Short n sweet
Is there a pun in the title or is it just my weird mind today ? 😂 lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, there is...thank you, Julie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Ok cool 😎

[emmajoy]

As ever you place words in your own special way. Use them sparely - in a way few others can yet leave the reviewer wondering what initiated the why.. Not that it matters, it still remains a gift.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a lucky gift...I am not responsible for what I write...just the conduit...
thank you, em,
read morea lucky gift...I am not responsible for what I write...just the conduit...
thank you, em,
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Magical, romantic and perfect! It’s a really beautiful piece and I love the whole thing. I keep rereading it, trying to find my favorite part or line but all of it’s written so well, with much emotion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Colacat.
j.