Known Once

Known Once

 

 

 

I cupped a drop of rain

in my tremored hand

 

it slipped through my fingers

like the water it was

 

and the cool drip

sashayed in freefall

 

I wanted to be that drop

escape from the palm of memory

 

splash to my demise

stop the trembling

 

dry to the touch of grass

be absorbed in grounded ambiguity

 

so your heart no longer

recognizes a hand that once held yours.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/17/21

Reviews

[Unspoken poet]

This is a wonderful write Jacob, Really like this.
I guess we all have a our differences in how we write.
Wonderful write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do, but in the end, it is all poetry...and that is a good thing.
j.

[_mal]

I liked ‘it slipped through my fingers like the water it was’

The first two lines made that drop feel precious and special and the second two felt (to me as a reader) that that fell away and brought you back to reality. You’ve done something special here

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, _mal,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

absolutely beautiful
no words again Jacob can do this justice

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie.
j.

[barleygirl]

This is how it feels to read one of my own poems & not being able to recognize that I wrote it or why (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't recognized more than half of mine....I write them and move on.
thank you, Margie,
read moreI don't recognized more than half of mine....I write them and move on.
thank you, Margie,
j.

[Ken Simm.]

This shows how important poetry is to politics even if so called politicians don't believe so. Beautifully written for todays climate.
I may be totally wrong here but I see this as empathy with the earth.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like where you took this one, Ken.
thank you,
j.

[Gee]

For some reason this brings my near neighbour to mind. His good lady died in the recent past after 60+ years of marriage and he can be seen to be slowly fading away, like he is just biding time until called to join her.Very sad to see
Hope you are well Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is so sad, Gee, and happens so often...
My dad surprised me...he and my mom were married for 70 years, she died in 2014...and he seemed to live only to take care of her...yet he carried on for three years.
Losing a mate after that long...no words can accurately describe.
thanks, Gee...doing well over here and hope the same for you..
j.

[Gee]

All good here Jacob, thank you

[lightsong]

"I cupped a drop of rain" I WILL steal that line too! what I feel here is something very painful, though the words are flowing with gentle sadness but at the end what I get is some profound pain, wanting to get rid not of memories but more deeper wanting to be erased completely from someone's memories, like we never existed to them, I know that feeling... I know the unbearable thoughts that flood with it, we simply don't want to be compared with anyone, so let us be nothing instead of being a sweet memory while the person enjoying love with another one, I maybe went off again but this is what your words speak to me, on another hand, it also speaks at the beginning about the power of surrendering.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Very touched to see where my lines might take a reader...Thank you for your insightful review, lightsong,
j.

[no tell writer]

I can see the image of the water falling through your hand, All is good, life goes on. Nicely written

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Katzie,
j.

[no tell writer]

Not a problem

[Einstein Noodle]

"Be water, my friend" Bruce Lee ;) Does everyone have one love that was so intoxicating and looses it? We never "get over it" do we, Jacob? best if it can be turned to true friendship says i ... i suppose i will always love her; but i would not ever re-enter that painful love relationship with her ... no no! ;) as i followed the path of your droplet ... slipping through fingers .. reforming into that drop and then the splash, the absorption and place of becoming undefinable ... a letting go of self .. into the much larger universe of "All" ... ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm ;) loved the read .. did me nog and soul some good sir!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

So many moments slip by leaving pain as a reminder. Splendid writing J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.