World War III

World War III 

 

happened yesterday in an Aesop's

poppy field,

 

where rifle tongues lashed out

at perceived enemy hearts

 

and the curses like bullets

shorn love to pieces

 

the medics charged

makeshift stretchers

 

moved mountains of bodies

who bested whom

 

as flowers fell with blood petals

she loved her enemy

 

when lines are drawn

the artist wreaks havoc

 

the sword cuts the pen in two

and love has its own unmarked grave.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/1/21

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Atlas-strong phrasing that twists all meaning out of current hateful attitudes (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Margie,
j.

[Shelley Warner]

I like that. "Perceived enemy hearts". Yes, WWIII is the war against love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Shelley,
Appreciate your visit.
j.

[Shelley Warner]

You're welcome.

[lightsong]

it's the invisible War, let it be inside the self or outside in the world. the poet stands in between love and hate, violence and peace, pen and sword, where to take his message and how? does he need to keep in balance as only an outsider or does he need to take a side? there is no escape, it's a blessing and a curse at the same time. I feel also a hint of unrequited love there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your words here, lightsong...
thank you for the visit and review. In between love and hate and all the others... a rock and a hard place.
j.

[Seth Cason]

I'm just... stunned. This is the kind of poetry I'm always searching for-- "rifle tongues," "curses like bullets," where the metaphorical melts into the literal, and by the end I'm left feeling clobbered and frozen and things that only the French have words for, but mostly I'm struck by the old, "How did he do that??" Although your poetry itself is a great teacher, if I lived in Illinois I'd pull a reverse Ferris Bueller and sneak *into* your class.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You would be welcome into my class anytime...and thank you for the kindness of your review, Seth.read moreYou would be welcome into my class anytime...and thank you for the kindness of your review, Seth.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

And love is always found in unmarked graves....the ones who got away and the ones never meant to be. "she loved her enemy"....many women stay with abusers. That has never made sense to me, but I know psychologically, they feel they are in prison. Those who attempt to rescue the abused are often rebuffed. This is where your words took me, Jacob. Not sure if that is what you had in mind. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I had in mind for you to take it where you would and appreciate your review, Lydi,
j.

[no tell writer]

Wow, quite an emotional read, so well expressed and written out

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Katzie....
j.