Above the Blue

Above the Blue

mother, daughter

fire, water

ashes in an urn

the faucet one last turn

grief is the son she carried to term

at birth, overwhelmed, she tried to hold him

but the umbilical was a sorrow she could not cut

the fire a scar constricting her throat

words just fumbled

future poorly mumbled

at heaven's door a mutual expression

as two souls embrace 

mother, daughter

fire, water

it is safe now.

erin-cilberto

12/22/21

Reviews

[lightsong]

Ok, I don't know if we are on the same wave these two days or not, but the new poem that was floating in my head from two days ago has some similarity to yours here. I should, I must, I can't not but address all what I see here, depression, suicide... on the other hand I see a stillborn baby. fire on the good side is life, is being alive, it's vibrate, while water quenches it. like death quenches life. I rarely mention my mother but she is fire, and when I say this I mean "HELL" fire, not fire the "life" I couldn't but see myself here as that Waters quenching it/her. wow! really I am stunned I never thought of this like that, Thank You for inspiring it in my head Mr. J! your emotive poem has few impacts in me!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Wow, very interesting where you took this...I like your interpretation immensely.
thank you for sharing, lightsong,
j.

[lightsong]

It's your poem that inspired them :> You are more than welcome 🤍

[Perdition]

A lot more "MORE" in your writing lately..seems to have grazed on emotion, shock, at least as far as I have read. A good turn at that professor. And the tug is one mortally horrific so to turn your page through experience or story or from wherever fresh hell falls from, life and death I suppose, is a brilliant heal...well, It's a damn good poem J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Perdition,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

A beautiful heartfelt emotional poem
Words escape me
Have a happy Christmas Jacob our was yesterday sounds strange lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julie,
j..

[Chris Shaw]

So much emotion in this short poem. So much sadness. The outcome I felt, better late than never.


Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Chris...appreciate your understanding,
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

This was really moving. Felt every bit of the pain of a lifetime of grief, then the relief. Excellent resolution of the tension built in the body of the poem. Well written!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

was a hard situation...thanks for your words, Bill,
j.

[Dave]

Jacob, you struck such a sorrowful chord with this. The grief you portray is just about unimaginable. My only feeling of relief is seeing that they both got to embrace in heaven. Such beauty, such power you have here.
Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Dave,
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Sad poem. One could really feel the emotion and picture things reading this. Interesting title as well, fitting. Very well written. Tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cyprian,
j.

[CyraDeLaRiv]

Ohhh... I got chills reading this. It is powerful! I really liked the descriptions you used.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cyra,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my Jacob, A really stunning peace inspite of the heartbreaking words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Dale,
peace,
j.